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Foreign language should be mastered by children since the earliest level of their education.


Liliy 12 / 13 6  
Jan 31, 2015   #1
All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grade. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Foreign language is becoming more essential in this age of globalization. Due to such a fact, over recent years all parents believe that a foreign language should be mastered by children since in the earliest level of their education. However, every children has different abilities to learn foreign language. Whereas it is reasonable, I have taken up against the perception as studying a foreign language has more benefits for children later development.

Multilingual skill has been believed by some people have positive effect for children. Result shows that semilingualism is one of biggest problem for young people because they learn one language which is not fully mastered. Taking students who are learned Mandarin, English, Hindi language as example, those are awesome language with largest population in the world with active user approximately 100 million to 1.04 billion. A lot of school in Indonesia use those language as ones language subject in school with multilingual purpose. As a consequence for this case children can face difficulties in social relationship with other people for the reason children learn foreign language to neglect their mother language indirectly.

The aforementioned evidence raises multifaceted perspective. The earlier children learn about foreign language, the easier for them to master it. Linguistic program study released data that children since 6 years until 12 years old are bests ages "golden age" for children learning about foreign language since they still have brain bending and plastic. As straight example gayatri one of children from Indonesia since seven years old had an ability to master fourteen languages, it could help gayatri to be child Asian ambassador since 2012 until 2013. Therefore, thinking global, sharpening cognitive abilities, having largest possibilities working in foreign country are positive result with children getting bright future.

As a final point, although study a foreign language can educate and give more benefit for children's life, giving opportunities for children playing with each other friends should be notice by parent that children also must have a time to themselves. Furthermore, looking children's ability should be one considered parent without compelling children to be master a lot of foreign language.
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Jan 31, 2015   #2
Result shows that semilingualism is one of the biggest problem for young people because they learn one language which is not fully mastered
should be notice d
to be master a lot of foreign language. this sentence is somehow perplexing. The last sentence of your introduction contradicts the second paragraph.
Attempt to take it with a grain of salt!
English is not my mother tongue .
motoja 3 / 7 2  
Feb 1, 2015   #3
Par. 1
every children child has different abilities to learn foreign language.
Par 2
Multilingual skill has been believed by some people to have positive effecta positive effect or positive effects for children
those are awesome languages There are other similar mistakes. Watch your singulars/plurals
Par 3
Therefore, thinking global, sharpening cognitive abilities, having largest possibilities working in foreign country are positive result with children getting bright future.
This sentence is not written properly. Here's my attempt: Therefore, ability to think globally, sharper cognitive abilities, and opprtinity to work in foreign countries are positive results that can give the child a chance of getting a brighter future.

Par 4
although study studying a foreign language
fadlanmuzakki 15 / 49 36  
Feb 20, 2015   #4
Hi liliy, I would like give some comments and suggestions for your essay:

over recent years all parents believe that a foreign language should be mastered by children since in the earliest level of their education

I think that this sentence is not easy to follow. What is more, you should make "present perfect" in this sentence as you use signal time "over recent years". Thus, I suggest you to rewrite such a sentence.

every children has different abilities

Subject + Verb Agreement

abilities to learn foreign language

"to" is not collocate with abilities, you should use appropriate preposition here; "on"

has more benefits for children later development

this sentence is bad flow as you cannot build your subject based on you noun of preposition.

have positive effect for children

1. ) you need an article here, or you can probably make it plural. => a positive effect of positive effects
2. ) "on" is not appropriate with effect, you should put a preposition "on" after the noun.

semilingualism

what you mean? do you mean it is multilingualism ? I suggest you to make sure your vocabularies when you want to use uncommon words. It is because we do not probably know yet how to use these vocabularies appropriately. Therefore, you should find the words in the reading passages first if you want to use them.

problem for young people

it hsould be problem of

Taking students who are learned Mandarin

I think you should read and correct your essay first before you upload. because of a great number of rudimentary grasps, you should make your sentences clearer to be read. I suggest you to change this sentence become an active sentence.You should have a fully grasp as to how to use adjective clause "subject correctly"

largest population in

ith should be the largest population of

There are many grammatical errors here,so I suggest you to deal with the problems first.

let me know when you finish it.Then, I am pleased to discuss about your flows and ideas.

KEEP STUDY, KEEP SPIRIT.


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