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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are the main source for many countries.



thaonguyennnnhp 1 / -  
Aug 21, 2026   #1
Despite the widespread use of fossil fuels, some countries have started to divert to alternative energy to cater their populations production and daily activities. While not without difficult initial adaptation, I firmly believe that this trend represents a predominantly positive development in such nations.

It is undeniable that the diversion to alternative energy can take a toll on the government budget. As a matter of fact, such alternative energy as solar or wind power require considerable expenditure on energy-generating equipment, storage systems and supporting infrastructures. Moreover, transitioning to renewable energy on a national scale requires a sufficient construction of facilities to meet the demands of all residents. For example, the average cost for installing a wind turbine for generating electricity is about three million dollars, and a country would require a wind farm with thousands of wind turbines in order to supply power to all companies as well as households across the country. Investing an enormous sum in purchasing and developing such facilities would put a heavy financial burden on the public budgets, especially in developing countries whose budget is relatively limited.

Nevertheless, I contend that such a shift towards using alternative energy is a worthwhile investment, since the aforementioned substantial upfront costs can be outweighed by several benefits it brings in the long run. It should be noted that once energy-generating facilities are sufficiently equipped, power can be continuously supplied without the concern of running out of resources. Unlike fossil fuels like coal, oil and natural gas, alternative energy like sunlight and wind are freely available natural resources which can be gained and utilized at any time and no matter how much we use, they never run out. This would largle reduce the recurring costs associated with extracting, purchasing and transporting, which are required for the use of fossil fuels. Furthermore, depending on fossil fuels such as natural gas or oil is too risky for a long-term energy consumption, as these are finite energy resources which can be depleted due to human's increasingly massive use. This fact emphasizes the need to look for alternative energy sources given the case traditional sources inevitably run out.

In conclusion, despite the potential financial risks in the very beginning of the introduction of alternative energy, I remain convinced that the long-term benefits that renewable energy brings to long-term development of the planet.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16170  
Aug 21, 2026   #2
Okay. It is clear to me that you understood the assignment of this task. However, your execution is flawed when it comes to the discussion paragraphs. The score for this essay will be based upon an under developed reasoning presentation, which may lead to a failing score or a very low passing score. Why did this happen?

Well, you are asked to provide 2 reasons for the point of view that you presented. That means, you do not need to explain the part about the expense of the initial conversion in the 1st reasoning paragraph. Instead, you need to present a reason that already supports your positive opinion of the given topic. By not providing 2 reasons, you are under discussing the bullet points for this topic and will receive the corresponding penalty for it.

The discussion is not about the difficulty in adopting renewable or alternative energy sources. The reasoning paragraphs should solely be focused on the 2 compelling reasons that you believe this is a positive development.
emillindberg - / 2  
Aug 21, 2026   #3
Your point is clear but I think the second paragraph is stronger than the first as the point about fossil fuels being finite works well while the wind turbine example feels a little too specific without a source. I'd also be careful with saying renewable energy can supply power "at any time," since wind and solar depend on weather and storage. Other than that, the argument is easy to follow.


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