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fossil fuels are the main sources of energy,alternative energy should be encouraged for used

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Mar 16, 2021   #1
While some government lean towards the view point
that fossil fuels are the major source of energy for most countries but green energy should be used substitute. From my point of view, I partly agree with this opinion and think that crude oil and green energy should be encouraged for simultaneous using. Although fossil fuels account for the vast majority of energy in most countries, it is also a double-edged sword.

On the one hand, alternative source et energy are not always available. In some areas which have narrow terrain and different natural conditions, setting up things like wind mills or solar panels is a challenging issue for them. For examples wind energy can not be used in the country that does not have coastline like Laos. Not only that, not every government has enough finance to invest in natural power. Installing solar panels for building hydropower factory costs too much money, which can be a obstacle to people who do not have well-off wage.

On the other hand, fossil fuels are non-renewables energy, it will run out in the foreseeable future. With current overexploitation petroleum, it likely to be exhausted soon. In addition, the factory that turns crude oil into power discharges exhaust fumes into the atmosphere, which result in greenhouse effect is and global warming. Contrast with natural energy, it do not cause pollution and environmentally friendly. In some developed county, government has introduced public transport using green energy into use widely

On balance, crude oil make up the majority of energy for most nation but natural energy should be used instead. It seems to me that everything has two sides of it, human should use at the same time both fossil fuels and alternative source of energy for high efficiency.

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Mar 17, 2021   #2
The original prompt for this essay asks if you think this is a positive or negative development. Since your response is that you partly agree with the issue, the response format, as you have provided, is incorrect. You have given a measured response to the prompt when the discussion instruction / question does not require such an answer. Therefore, your TA score will start at a failing level due to your unrelated response to the prompt. Now, since you did not properly respond to the question, which is a one sided opinion discussion, the essay cannot receive a passing score. Once your response format for the TA section is incorrect, the rest of the discussion paragraphs are incorrect as well. So you cannot expect to get a passing score with this type of presentation because:

- You failed to use the correct response format to the question;
- Your discussion presentation uses the comparative format when the discussion requires a single opinion explanation
- You clearly showed the examiner that you did not understand the original prompt topic, question, and discussion instruction

We have sample essay responses to this prompt listed in the Similar Threads section. I suggest that you read those essays to gain a better understanding of how to approach this type of prompt question.

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