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Free choice of subjects to study - IELTS writing task 2 assistance

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Oct 26, 2018   #1

subjects in higher education

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Decision about subjects in higher education is individual choice. Although, some argue that futuristic subject like Science and Technology should only be taught by universities, others, including me, believe that matured students should be given chance to follow their dreams and study what they desire.

Students at tertiary education level should have freedom to deciding their course which, in fact, is beneficial for the individuals and society at large. Firstly, it is better to give every single student a chance to explore their interest. In fact, if students are forced to study complex subjects as STEM, their overall performance will fall and ultimately their career might be destroyed. For example, I marginally passed few compulsory subjects in m Bachelor's degree like Chemistry which, I promised to myself, to never study again. Finally, subjects like Politics and Economics are as important, if not more, as science for deciding advancement and functioning of society as a whole. I don't think a scientist is well suited to run for a president!

On the other hand, research and innovation through science and technology is necessary for advancement of society. Even though demand for scientist and engineers are always on a rise, if every student is forced to read them, due to high supply of work force, demands and value might fall drastically. Secondly, although society needs explorer and engineers to explore new frontiers and rapid progress, it definitely needs lawyers and politicians to check and shape the direction of growth. For instance, genetic engineering is now into unexplored realm. Now, it is even possible to clone a human being. So, there is always a ethical and moral issue associated which should be properly discussed among fellow human being and rightly regulated.

In conclusion, on the light of above discussed reasons, I truly believe that every candidates should get chance to decide the subjects they study which is beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole.

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Oct 27, 2018   #2
Suraj, there is a lack of clarity in the essay that you presented. That is because you are not representing the public discussion of the two points of view in the essay. You have created a singular personal point of view discussion even as you have been told in the instructions to present a discussion of the 2 public points of view prior to a stand alone paragraph discussion of your personal opinion. It is not a one liner, it needs to be a complete paragraph.

When you discussed the two points of view, a reference to the public reference of discussion is required. That way the reader knows that you are representing POV 1 then POV 2 before your personal point of view. This is done by referring to phrases such as "The group that believes that..." "When the public considers the discussion that...". Both of these sample phrases show ownership at the start of the paragraph which clarifies who is talking and in the process, indicates what type of point of view is discussed. This type of clarity will help to increase your scoring potential because the essay discussion becomes clearer to everyone reading the essay.

Your reasoning is acceptable but is mostly presented as run-on sentences, Don't muddle the presentation with a series of reasons, one reason is sufficient, Just properly develop the explanation to make your words clear in meaning to the reader. Fully develop a single reason. It will score better than several under explained reasons in a single paragraph. Use simple sentences that have a clear meaning. Don't try to connect different ideas in one sentence presentation. That blurs the actual topic and meaning of the sentence and affects the clarity and coherence of your essay, as well as the GRA considerations when it comes to sentence structure and grammar considerations.

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