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IELTS ESSAY - FREEDOM TO EXPRESS IDEAS; '3 Idiots'


Geenesh 21 / 29  
Jul 15, 2011   #1
Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, picture, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Artists in most countries are given the freedom to express their thoughts in whatever they do. Nevertheless, some argue that there should be government restrictions in order to limit their opinions. I however, agree to this only to a certain extent and believe that the artists must be given freedom so that they will produce some really marvelous masterpiece.

First and foremost, if there is control over artists' ideas, they will definitely lose their sense of creativity in the long run. It is undeniable that when they are given the opportunity to express themselves, most artists will think out of the box and come up with spectacular Arts such as paintings or movies. For example, paintings by Da Vinci and Michallengo are admired even till now as they were not restricted during those times. In short, without any limitations, there will be more awe inspiring work from our artists.

Furthermore, it is every human's right to be able to voice out their opinions in any ways as long as they do not cause any problems to the nation. Today, many countries make numerous efforts to show that they are democratic countries. Arts is one of the ways that can be used to criticise social problems and government policies in a particular country. To illustrate this further, the famous movie '3 Idiots' acted by Amir Khan criticises the education system which is chiefly based on memorising and not being able to apply whatever the students learn. Thus, human rights is violated if artists are not allowed to express their feelings freely.

Looking from another perspective, there are certain drawbacks if artists are not restricted. They might go deeper into certain aspects that can cause controversies in a country. To cite an example, Malaysia is a multiracial country whereby all the citizens live together in harmony and peace. In case there is anyone who brings up some sensitive issues in their films or books regarding any races, this might end up in some chaos among the society. Nonetheless, I believe that artists know their boundaries very well and would surely do not want their names tarnished just because of their unscrupulous acts.

To conclude, it is now evident that there should not be any restrictions on artists' work. Allowing them to think freely will give them an opportunity to express themselves as ideas can naturally flow when there are no limitations. Hence, even though freedom to express ideas can bring some negative effects, I certainly believe that there are many wonderful and beautiful Arts due to the freedom to express ideas and thus, I strongly believe there should be no restrictions on them.

nguyendinhtuong 4 / 14 9  
Jul 15, 2011   #2
First of all, I appreciate your essay, because of the way you use grammar and vocabularies. You really pay your attention to do it.
Next, this topic is still questionable, so there can be some opposing ideas about Arts as well as artists. By the way, but, wait for a moment. The IELTS writing requires an essay with about 250 - 300 words, so I think your essay is quite long. From my point of view, the introduction and the conclusion should have only about 3 sentences. And I try to check some sentences:

- Arts is one of the ways that can be used to criticise social problems and government policies in a particular country.

- Furthermore, it is every human's right to be able to voice out their opinions in any ways as long as they do not cause any problems to the nation.
hvthoteen 16 / 44 4  
Jul 15, 2011   #3
your essay is pretty good but i think thera are some small mistakes:
I, however, agree or However, I agree
There are controls
shahdad 7 / 17  
Jul 16, 2011   #4
that is nice essay but it is too long for IELTS,you may loose score for it.
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jul 16, 2011   #5
Hi Sangeeetha,
u have written a beautiful essay,... reasons r strong n the flow is coherent---- as far as the length fr an ielts exam is concerned,if ur handwriting is small i wud say u can write 325-350 words n if u write big words then u shud limit it around 300-325...

- copy this essay in MS word n check ur word count...

- only the length of this essay is questionable else its a very beautiful essay my frnd.

-@Shahdad- my friend its "lose" n not "loose" in this case...lose is like winning or losing .... n loose is like a tight knot or a loose knot....they have different meanings-

gud luck n cheers
shahdad 7 / 17  
Jul 16, 2011   #6
@Shahdad- my friend its "lose" n not "loose" in this case...lose is like winning or losing .... n loose is like a tight knot or a loose knot....they have different meanings-

yup you are right,this days i am getting really reckless,write goverment instead of government or resturant instead of restaurant are common mistakes that i do.

thanks for correcting me,i do appreciate it.


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