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'fresh ideas of creating new successful starts-up' - should we follow customs of a visited country?


Ioda_Julia 1 / 1  
Mar 15, 2015   #1
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Give your opinion.

Nowadays people have a lot of varieties for going out to another country without any obstructions. Due to travelling a person may broaden the mind meeting with local inhabitants and observing customs and style of life. Nevertheless, dynamic movement over the world is led to heated discussions between the people who assert that the visitors should not impose their customs on the locals and people, who consider that the host country should become assimilated. However, in this essay I am trying to discuss about both sides of the issues.

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andi_83 - / 9 5  
Mar 15, 2015   #2
Hello I made a few suggestions for improvement. Hope it helps you :)

Nowadays people have a lot of varieties for going out to visit another country without any obstructions. Due to travelling a person may broaden the mind meeting with local inhabitants and observing customs and style of life.One of the benefits of travelling is that a person can broaden his mind through spending time with local inhabitants and observing their customs and style of life. Nevertheless, dynamic movement over the world ishas led to heated discussions between the people who assert that the visitors should not impose their customs on the locals and people, who consider that the host country should become assimilated. However, in this essay I amwill trying to discuss about both sides of the issues.

First of all, some visitors who come from highly industrialisedindustrialized countries to underdeveloped ones may bring fresh ideas of creating new succsessful successful starts-ups .
Moreover, the visitors may help the locals to extend their knowledge in different spheres and exchange their experience. A local inhabitant does not need to go to a far-away from his country and at the same time a visitor may have a rest and have the chance to tell about inovationsinnovationsofin his home country.

Also the visitors as the representatives of particular culture may describe the locals as the most outstanding places and peculiarities of living at their country. (Not clear what you are trying to say in this sentence, try rephrasing it.)

So people may travel around the world without leaving the house.
In spite of all positive points, there are some drawbacks which visitors may bring with them. Firstly, some people don't make any effort to understand the locals, their habits and customs. ItThis may lead to arguments and fights and as a result the level of crime would bemay rise.

In addition, some people try to rebuild the country or a place on the model of their own country. They impose rules and their thoughts on others without taking into account the fact, that not each everyone has the same beliefs.

All things considered, it can be concluded that a host country has more beneficial effects than disadvantages of coming visitors. Interaction between people from different countries may promote the development of a nation and become a provider of recentinnovative ideas.
OP Ioda_Julia 1 / 1  
Mar 15, 2015   #3
Thank you for correction


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