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Friendship bond by school tradition


AhmadMohdRazali 1 / -  
Sep 13, 2015   #1
An incident that reflected a conflict between yourself as an individual and yourself as member of collective.(community,friends,age group,race,religion)

It is hard to admit that school life was the best moment in my life yet it made what I am today. I remember that my friends were always beside me whenever I faced problems. Apart from studies ,school is all about friendship that I cherished so much. Until one night, the brotherhood the had been build for years was put into test. The incident I went through for me to see how loyal I was to my friends.

It was Saturday night, we arranged perfectly that night for the birthday celebration for my best buddy Putera Karl. We even prepared the food so that we could celebrate together .Since he was so popular in my school my dorm was crowded with friends just to celebrate his best moment. After we finished celebrating Karl birthday,I knew that all my other mischievous friends especially Hafiz the head prefect of the school planned to practice the tradition that had been performed since ages ago but I did not intended to join them . I felt it was wrong to do such a thing to anyone because it would cause excruciating pain at the pubic region which would last for days-or worst, for weeks. . To be honest, i found it really grossing practices but i enjoyed watching the suffer that the victim been through.

"Ahmad can you lookout for me please."Hafiz whispered to me.
Since i wanted to feel belonging and other hand I also did not want to join them, I was willing to eagle eyes in front of the dorm so that I that I could warn the others if the warden appeared .Frankly if the warden knew about all of this ,we would be in the big trouble I could say .More severe consequence,It could be a police case on sexual harassment .

The excitement just begun when the light went off .Solely seek for enjoyment my friend Syakir with other guys held both of Karl's hands forcefully .

"Guys hold him and don't let him go !"instructed by Hafiz

Hafiz then aggressively poked his leg repetitively to Karl's pubic region .It looked really painful, then thing stopped simultaneously when Karl unintentionally shouted really loud with pain expressed by his face .Then we realized that we actually woke up warden ,most of my friend fled back to their dorm .But how about me ?"where can i go ,would i leave my best friend behind?" . As the sound of engine motorcycle beat my eardrum,my heart pounded with fear -I knew the warden was coming.

Faces of curiosity entered the dorm .Not one ,but two !It left me speechless when the wardens started to shoot me with a lot of question. There was mess around the dorm and most importantly my friend was laying with great pain ,Then came this killer question ," Did you do Toron-the school tradition just now?"one of the warden asked suspiciously .At first i was reluctant to admit but i had no choice just to admit that i did it."who did it with you ?"I thought it would be over when i admitted but things just got worst .I was stuttered to answer that question ,I really faced dilemma just speak the truth so that i could escape from this turmoil.The warden in fact blackmailed me to report this things to the administrator , but i just froze in fear confronted of them .Then they started to act aggressively by pushing my chest.They did not give up ,they even brought cane inside the dorm and gave me one last chance to reveal everything.,"Let me be the scapegoat of their wrongdoing" I monologue.One of the warden whipped my back really hard that i could feel my flesh being sliced and then they just left me with the pain that I did not deserve.

Later as I laid on the bed ,I had a strong reaction on what just happen. My head was thinking about the further punishment that ill be getting tomorrow .Surely it would be more severe than previous one.I was wondering my decision just now ,was it right ? Then my thought interrupted as Karl approached me and told me that I did a right decision.He made me felt better ,maybe the pain that i bear cant be compared to the friendship that i really valued .I felt i did a right choice by following my heart .
Muhammadyusuf 7 / 13  
Sep 13, 2015   #2
Let me try brother.

It is hard to admit that school life was the best moment in my life (you must put comma in here) yet it made what I am today. I remember that my friends were always beside me whenever I faced problems. Apart from studies, school is all about friendship that I cherished so much. Until one night, the brotherhood thethey had been build for years was put into test. The incident I went through for me to see how loyal I was to my friends.

After we finished celebrating Karl birthday, I knew that all my other mischievous friends especially Hafiz the head prefect of the school planned to practice the tradition that had been performed since ages ago but I did not intended intend to join them. I felt it was wrong to do such a thing to anyone because it would cause excruciating pain atin the pubic region (put comma) which would last for days-or worst, for weeks. . To be honest, iI found it really grossing practices (put comma) but i enjoyed watching the suffer that the victim been through.


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