A horrible accident happened in Mexico's gulf when an oil tanker of petroleos mexicanos , called the burgos, transporting about 168,000 barrels had burned on Saturday. However, after having fought to extinguish the fire for a day, firefighting boats could blow out the blaze successfully and they had to use chemical materials against the flame. Fortunately, there are no victims in this tragedy. After this incident, the authority set off inquiring the factors causing the fire in the vessel . In a fact, any oil flow had been averted by Burgos' double hull since the volatility of fuel could affect oil vaporization. Apart from this, actually the burgos had taken step to ward off the oil spill to reach the coast by spreading the booms about a mile of containment.
Hi Aris, below are my thoughts for your summary essay.
n horrible accident
on slast S aturday.
- However, after having fought to extinguish the fire
for a day ,
could ble w out the blaze succesfully
andas they had to used chemical
- the authority set off
inquiring the factors causinga fact finding committee to know the cause of the fire in the vessel .
- Apart from this,
actually the burgosthe vessel had taken
the steps to ward off the oil spill to reach
- in reaching the coast by spreading
the booms for about a mile of containment.
There you have it Aris, there's still a lot of work to be done and you need to expose yourself more into writing and reading a lot will help too.
hi friend I have some suggestion make your better essay
called the burgos the better is
it is called or it called ... after comma you have to add subjection that esier in reading
any oil flow had been averted shoul be
there oil flow.... or the oil ..
i give you in using on any
any usually used to negative sentence or question sentence,,,
i hope it will help you...
your arranging essay is good ,and you have to pay more attention about what i told you ...
i have an advice to your essay
A horrible accident happened in Mexico's gulf when an oil tanker of petroleos mexicanos , called the burgos, transporting about 168,000 barrels had burned on Saturday.
there are 3 verb, but only one conjunction (when).....to complete your sentence, you should use 2 conj.
when an oil tanker of petroleos mexicanoscapitalization issue, it is a name of a company.
[refer to firefighting boats, not firefighters
] had to use chemical ...
there are no victims in this tragedy.only 'victims' is unclear. it could mean 'something' or 'somebody', you need to directly state human victims for example
... the authority set off inquiring questions related to
the factors causing the fire in the vessel . In
fact, .....at all, it seems that you already have a passable writing skill since you have structured your sentences well. However, you are still need to learn and enhance your proficiency on writing, particularly, by concerning your word chosen for example. besides, i realize that this article is too easy to summary, you just even only to paraphrase it, since it is too short. try to summary the larger or more complicated on