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IELTS Task 1 : Full-time and Part time Education in Britain

Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Feb 18, 2014   #1
The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The bar chart shows the total number of male and female who take full-time or part time study in higher education in Britain from 1970 to 1990.

In general, it can be seen from the chart that part time education is the highest number which is chosen by most of student male and female. In contrast, full time education is the lowest number between male and female but it is slightly increase in three periods.

The number of men who take part-time study in 1970 was 1000 thousands. Then, ten years later, it dropped steadily to 850 thousands and went up slowly to 900 thousand in 1990. Turn into the women, the number of student female who take part-time education stood at 700 thousand in 1970 and over the two decades, it rose swiftly by 400 thousand and reached a peak at 1100 thousands.

Conversely, the students who take full-time education in three periods were not many. The number of male in full-time education was 100 thousands and it increased gradually over twenty years to 200 thousands. Next, the lowest number of female in full-time education at approximately 50 thousands but between 1980 and 1990 it grew quickly in around 200 thousands.

SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 19, 2014   #2
Hi, there
As far I know
I should be 200 thousand not 200 thousands
Please kindly re-check yours.

And I observe there are 4 similar pattern with this

The number of men who take...

Good luck :)
OP Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Feb 19, 2014   #3
I should be 200 thousand not 200 thousands

yeah I think I made mistake with the word
thank you for the correction :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Feb 19, 2014   #4
It is better you presented these details in a manner of analysis. I mean compare the figures of males and females or the year recorded highest numbers and the lowest numbers. What you've written above do not present any comparison or analysis.

It seems you have an understanding of overall structure. But make your writing more presentable.

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