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We can not function without doctors because they are more important than inventors.. A/D?


pikul 23 / 26 3  
Dec 14, 2015   #1
We can't live without doctors because they are more important than inventors..

Nowadays, in modern era, there are a lot of useful inventions in order to make people's lives easier than in the past. However, several people believe that doctors are more important than inventors so as to reach healthy life. I would argue from both point of view.

People who live in sophisticated era will understand that inventors are absolutely important for people's life because they find many inventions which are obviously useful in lots of sectors such as medical, construction, sport, and many others. For example, Thomas Alfa Edison, the person who found the lamp, prove that everyone in this planet needs lamp for their life including a doctor. He needs lamp in order to help their job when they treat their patient or in surgery process. As a result, inventors are also essential for them.

However, several people argue that inventors are not as important as doctors because they help people directly and medicine. In addition, doctors's services are more essential for them because they safe many life and treat people who have diseases. Furthermore, nowadays, there are some doctors who are willing to work voluntary while inventors are not which means that people must buy their inventions by their own money. Hence, doctors are extremely neccessary and important for human life.

To sum up, it is clear to me that although doctors are essential for human life, I believe that inventors are substantial as well. Besides, in my opinion, both of them should work together to make peole's lives better than now.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Dec 14, 2015   #2
Nowadays, in modern eraIn our modern era IN OUR MODERN ERA, there are a lot of useful inventions in order to that make make people's lives easier than in the past. However, several people believe that doctors are more important than inventors so as to reach BECAUSE PEOPLE NEED TO LEAD A healthy life. I would argue from both point of view THAT BOTH POINTS OF VIEW ARE CORRECT.

People who live in sophisticated THIS era will understand that inventors are absolutely important for IN people's life LIVES (PLURAL FORM) because they find many inventions which are obviously useful in lots of sectors such as medical, construction, sport, and many others. For example, Thomas Alfa ALBA Edison, the person who found the lamp WHO INVENTED THE LIGHT BULB, proveD that everyone in this planet needs lamp TO EVERYONE THAT ACCESS TO LIGHT IN THE DARK OR AT NIGHT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT IN OUR LIVES AS A DOCTOR IS TO CURE OUR ILLNESSES. for their life including a doctor. IN FACT, THE DOCTOR NEEDS THE LIGH BULB IN THE EXAMINATION LAMP IN ORDER TO TREAT HIS PATIENTS. IT HELPS HIM SEE THE PROBLEM OF THE PATIENT. He needs lamp in order to help their job when they treat their patient or in surgery process. As a result, inventors are also essential for them.

However, several people argue that inventors are not as important as doctors because they DO NOT help people directly IN TERMS OF THEIR PHYSICAL REQUIREMENTS WHILE DOCTORS TREAT THE PHYSICAL NEEDS OF THE PATIENT. and medicine . In addition, doctors's DOCTOR services are more essential for them because they safe SAVE many life LIVES and treat people who have diseases. Furthermore, nowadays, there are some doctors who are willing to work voluntary while inventors are not which means that people must buy their inventions by their own money. FURTHERMORE, SOME DOCTORS TREAT PATIENTS FOR FREE IN THEIR CAPACITY AS VOLUNTEERS WHILE INVENTORS ALWAYS SELL THEIR PRODUCTS. Hence, doctors are extremely neccessary and important for human life.

To sum up, it is clear to me that although doctors are essential for THE EXISTENCE OF human life, I believe that inventors are substantial as well. Besides, in my opinion, THEREFORE, both of them should work together to make peole's lives better than now PEOPLE'S LIVES EVEN BETTER.

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You need to work on creating a clear line of thought, using plural forms, and using proper terms for words. Make sure, while doing your practice tests, that you run your spell checker in order to make sure that you do not make any spelling or punctuation mistakes. Those problems seem to exist as lot in this current essay of yours.

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OP pikul 23 / 26 3  
Dec 14, 2015   #3
thanks for the suggestion sir, hope i can improve my writing skills in the future :D


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