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Genetic engineering is an important issue in modern society.


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Sep 23, 2017   #1
Genetic engineering is an important issue in modern society. Some people think that it will improve people's live in many way others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


genetics in service to improve the quality of human life



The development of Genetic Modification technique brings some problem among society. Some people tend to believe that the use of this method will improve the qualities of a human life by modifying the human DNA to resist from the chronic diseases, while others more agree if this way can be danger for living creature since the limitation of the genetic can be stagnant. However, this writing strongly believes that modifying genes are good for human's problems.

In a science world, the scientist race one another in finding and solving human problems regarding enhancing human's live by modification of DNA. By doing this activity, the majority of researchers believe that this scientific research can help people against some diseases even before the baby is born by analyzing the gene as soon as possible. All the children will be born with healthy and resistant from the illness. For example, a lot of develop countries make an abortion become legal rule for certain condition to tackle down the issue of the hereditary disease or not, like leukemia or heart attack.

Apart from the previous explanation, having limited genetic diversity also threatens for the humankind. Having high price for do the treatment for a sufferer of chronic diseases will limited the diversity of gene, due to the one who may only affordable for this is the rich. For example, by the survey of WHO in 2016 revealed that 70% of people in 2050 remaining same person dominated by the rich, thanks to the cloning therapy toward genetic modifier. This is a detrimental scene for human life, remembering that the rich will monopolize it, while the poor will be die slowly.

To sum up, the pro and contrast will be happen among societies in respond the usage of genetically modified for improving the human qualities. Weather a chronic disease from parents or not, it is no longer become a frightening case for human, although, the genetic engineering may limit the variation of the gene.

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Sep 23, 2017   #2
Heru, your essay discusses the topic in a manner that runs against the expected discussion. The discussion instruction was indicated by the original prompt as being a comparison of the two points of view before the presentation of your personal opinion. What you did was develop your own discussion format in a manner that you felt proper for your understanding of the topic. You did not consider the proper formatting of the essay discussion as indicated by the original prompt. You also did not accurately discuss the topic in the manner instructed. This essay would get an automatic fail in an actual test setting.

For starters, you did not paraphrase the prompt in the opening statement. You discussed the topic immediately which is a violation of the TA requirements. That violation and lack of proper instruction in the thesis statement would automatically result in a score of 1 for this essay. That failure cannot be overcome and your overall score will be a failing grade.

Kindly remember that you will not have any opportunity to access the outside internet from the testing center. Therefore, you are not in a position to cite facts and figures as you did on this essay. Always use common sense, popular opinion, and logic to discuss all provided essay topics. You must ensure that you practice the test in an actual setting format so that you will know what the allowable movements and limitations in your discussion will be on that day.
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Sep 23, 2017   #3
... Modification technique precipitates problems upon society. Some people tend to favor the technique because modifying the human DNA to resist from the chronic diseases can improve the (...), while others believe this can be dangerous for living creature ...

However, this writing strongly believes ... (reword this, you don't have to state "this writing." Say something alongs the line of: However, studies have proven that modifying genes have been efficient in solving ... (also elaborate more on what kind of "human problems")

In a science world, scientists race one another (...) problems by enhancing human lives through the modification of DNA. A majority of researchers (...) some diseases give exampleseven before the baby ...

To sum up, the pro and contrastpro's and con's will be (...) in regards to the usage of ...
WeatherWhether a chronic disease from parents or not, it is no longer become ... I don't understand what you are trying to say in this last sentence. You have to state more details for clarification.


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