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Getting new knowledge from book is good choice. TED 13 Why I read a book a day


nurul66 2 / 2  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
TED 13 Why I read a book a day

Everyone wants a good life, but they don't know hot to get it or just do as they want. There are 5 rules that they have to follow or we called it 'design of life'. 5 rules are finding the mentor, humble, preserve, reading a book, and thinking top enough. First to find the mentor, we have to look outside and learn the knowledge from everywhere. We can see and take their strategy/knowledge to be a success person. Everyone can be your mentor, like teacher, parents, or friend. The second is being humble person. Don't be cocky and make a good relation with others. The third rule, preserver. Fourth is reading a book. Getting new knowledge from book is good choice. One book a week. The last is thinking top enough. If we do the rules, it can be easier to get a good life.
abangabul93 15 / 27  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Hai @nurul66, I got some suggestions for your writing:

1. but they don't (DO NOT) know .. (in academic writing, you are prohibited to use contraction)

2. hot (HOW) to get it or just...

3. (THE) 5 rules are finding the mentor, (BEING) humble, preserve (PERSEVERANCE), reading a book, and thinking top enough.

4. We can see and take their (HER or HIS) strategy/ (OR) knowledge to be a success person. (According to your previous sentence, you use "mentor not mentors", so you should put her/his)

5. ... your mentor, like teacher(S), parents, or friend(S). (pay attention on parallel structure)


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