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I was ghosted by a girl and I just let it go


benny812 1 / -  
Apr 16, 2019   #1

The toxic relationship



l won't contact the one who ghosts me twice. Though it is a common phenomenon in modern easy-going society. But it doesn't mean right. The first time she ghosted me I just let it go. But this is the second time. And I believe if I just act everything is fine this kinda thing will happen again. I won't blindly forgive the person who hurts me. I won't stoop to another person's level.

There're two possible reasons why she ghosted me:
First, she's a moody person. If she gets angry or mad, she just ignores me. A moody person can go to emotional extremes in a short period of time, and she is definitely a toxic partner. The best way to deal with her is going away.

Second, she's a rude person who does not show respect to others. No response means no respect, whilst no responsibility in a relationship. The best way to deal with her is going away.

My friends believe her behavior and what she said shows the lack of respect and impolite actions. That makes them do not have a good opinion on her. The healthy relationship helps each other to be better ones. The toxic relationship makes at least one person suffer and lose energy. So it's time to brush off this nasty encounter and just let it go.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Apr 16, 2019   #2
Are you writing this for a creative writing class?
You should always ensure that your language is articulated smoothly. While your essay has content and attempts to write in a structured format, prose requires people to truly be descriptive in their tone. You can do this through having more of a story-telling language rather than a muted, monotonous approach to the topic of the essay.

You should also review your fundamentals of grammar because there were instances wherein you had lapses or puny mistakes that could easily be fixed.
Let's take your first paragraph as an example. I would phrase this instead as:
I refuse to contact a person who would ghost me twice. This may be common in our easy-going society, however it doesn't mean it is correct.

Make sure that you compose your sentences as clear as possible through having more hold over the structure. Evade sentences that leave hanging questions.
Like what I had mentioned in the beginning, you should also try to be more descriptive. Tell stories in relation to what you are stating. What has she done in the past that qualifies her as a toxic partner? What was an instance that she showed disrespect to other people?

Your concluding remarks were also quite unclear. Are you trying to say that you want to let this person go?
Like most essay writing, creative works should always aim to have a structured beginning and end (not unless you are attempting to use a different structure). Knit a story that would come out as believable.

Best of luck.


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