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Gilgit Baldistan the paradise like motherland


Malik Achakzai 3 / 12 3  
Nov 26, 2012   #1
Please Check my thread and suggest me how to make it be on exact lines...

Gilgit Baldistan are they safe and sound?

Please could you please help me in my piece. Thank you

"We were having a happy life, our system is based upon harmony for hundereds of year, they [sectarian violence creators] destabilizes all" says on anonymously, a student from Gilgit currently enrolled in the BUITEMS University of Quetta, Balochistan.

Muhammad Khan from Chathral the bordering city of Khyber Pashtoonkhwa with Gilgit Baldistan illusturate "Gilgit Baldistan were well known for the peace and union the community had", adds further "we were having them as an example of peace, they have lived here peacefully for centuries".

Gilgit Baldistan the paradise like geography, culture, civilization and people, they are ancient Greece and later Afghans, their bad fortune to be part of Pakistan, no matter their community on the other side of the border in Nuristan and Baldistan of Afghanistan are having a safe life and enjoy every sort of fundamental human rights. I don't think they will remain happy here [in side Pakistan], every day shouldering the funerals of loved ones. So, we can ask, "won't Afghanistan be an attractive place for them rather than current Pakistan"?

"Our relatives with whom we are having blood relations, we have many girls married to them live freely and with peace inside the 4 decades of war torn Afghanistan" told Laila a lady health worker from Gilgit, "Our forefathers decided to be part of Pakistan for the cause of Islam, that was the day of our bad fortune, that's the reason now we slaughtered under the same title of Islam".

Why and who changed this paradise like motherland of Gilgities and Baldistanies into a hell? Who are responsible for the sectarian violence on this land of harmony, peace and stability? Everyone is aware of the circumstances and history, or if not then just have a check on the martial laws of Pakistan, specially the era of Gen: Zia Ul Haq, sewed the most dangerous seed of violence, hate and terror. That has claimed thousands of innocent lives just on the name of sect.

Paradin Tarin a Phd scholar from the department of Area Study Center at University of Balochistan tells, "The Gilgities and Baldistanies were having the strongest social system, they were united, they would have lived for thousands of year with the same system unless the current violence had erupt".

It's very hard to live in an area where you are not having any chance to survive due to the ferocious and barbaric phase of sectarian violence [the most dangerous form of terrorism]. Let's pray for the people of Gilgit Baldistan be safer. And this Muhram passes on with harmony and peace.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 26, 2012   #2
You have too many sentences that are seperated by commas. It is confusing. Why not re-write this and post it here. Remember, you should separate sentences with a full stop and start the new sentence with a capital letter.

I don't think they will remain happylive happily there. Every everyday they shoulder the funerals of loved ones, won't Afghanistan be an attractive place for them rather than current Pakistan?
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 27, 2012   #3
Hi,
I don't understand the statement you make on the top... It is always better that you give us the topic or the purpose of this writing so that we understand it better and have the ability to provide you with a more relevant feed back!


Muhammad Khan from Chathral the bordering city of Khyber Pashtoonkhwa with Gilgit Baldistan illusturates"Gilgit Baldistan were well known for the peace and union the community had", adds further "we were having them as an example of peace, they have lived here peacefully for centuries".

This has a few grammar issues. This is my suggestion;
Muhammad Khan from Chathral, the bordering city of Khyber Pastoonkhwa font#FF0000] and Giligit Baldistan, asserts '' Gilgit Baldistan was well known for its peaceful united community''. He further adds '' we always consider them as an exemplary group of people who lived peace and harmony for centuries "
OP Malik Achakzai 3 / 12 3  
Nov 27, 2012   #4
Thank you Dumi, actually it was a story for the news paper.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 27, 2012   #5
Okkkkkkkkkk.... now I see :D

But I still don't understand what is Gilgit Baldistan. I guess it's a city. Am I right?
Is this in Afganistan?
Also who is Muhammad Khan ? Is he a famous person?

Gilgit Baldistan the paradise like geography, culture, civilization and people,

My suggestion;
Gilgit Baldistan is a paradise in every sense; its unique geography, vibrant culture, rich civilization and great people together made this place one of the most beautiful cities in the world.
OP Malik Achakzai 3 / 12 3  
Nov 27, 2012   #6
Gilgit Baldistan an area inside Pakistan, having the same sample of population on the other side of the border inside Afghanistan.

Muhammad Khan a tribal leader in Chathral, an old man knowing the period of history he has passed through.


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