The writer committed 2 grave errors in this presentation that will cause the prompt restatement + personal opinion paragraph to receive a failing score:
- He mentions social media in reference to information sharing where none was made previously. This makes his restated reference inaccurate and deviant in presentation. It is not an acceptable rewording of the original topic.
- Rather than simply stating his opinion after presenting the 2 public viewpoints, he has decided that the essay will be discussed based on the:
benefits and drawbacks of this idea
Rather than a simple comparative discussion of the public opinion v. his personal opinion. The essay has already failed in totality at this point as the writer did not follow the writing instructions as provided by the original presentation. He created his own discussion basis, which is not related to the previously provided information. He did not understand the discussion instructions and cannot be given a passing score because of this misunderstanding of the response format on his part.