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The given line chart provides the quantity of graduated students in universities of Canada


ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Nov 11, 2016   #1
The given line chart provides the quantity of graduated students in universities of Canada in the period between 1992 and 2007 according to sexes. Overall, it is really important to notice that although both of sexes had simillar pattern which saw an upward trend, females were the higher number than males .

In 1992, both woman and man graduated proportion stood at 100 thousand and 70 thousand respectively; then, both were followed by a downward trend in 1995. Afterwards, there had been a slight decrease in both by 1997. Between 1997 and 2001 female graduate proportion fluctuated slightly around 100 thousand compared to male proportion at approximately 75 thousand.

In the following year, female figure showed a sharp rise in number of graduates by a half of the former and reached a peak at just below 150 thousand graduates. In contrast, by the same period, the quantity of male graduates had increased slightly by 25 thousand and had finished at about 95 thousand.

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mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 11, 2016   #2
Dear Ibe, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

Overall, it iswas really important to notice ...

...been a slight decreased in both by 1997.

... 2001 female graduated proportion fluctuated slightly ...

... showed a sharp risen in number of graduates by ...

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OP ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Nov 11, 2016   #3
Aloha Edho, thank you for your correction. However, I want to response to your commentary;

Overall, it iswas really important to notice ... (I use simple present to explain an introduction of my overview)
...been a slight decreaseddecrease in both by 1997.(I still use "decrease" because I want to mention noun NOT adjective or verb here)


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