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Glass recycling - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PROCESS


pth_12345 1 / -  
Jun 15, 2022   #1

The picture shows the process of glass recycling.



Overall, the process comprises several stages, starting with the collection of used glass items, through different treatment steps, and ending with final products being delivered to the supermarkets or customers.

At the beginning of the process, glass waste is collected at the collection points, after which it is transported by trucks to the factories to be recycled into usable products. Subsequently, the glass is cleaned using high pressurized water to remove all the dirty substances left to be ready for production. After being washed, it is classified into three different groups according to its color: brown, green, and clear.

The process continues with the glass being melted in the high-temperature chamber until it becomes liquid form. Recycled liquid glass is then mixed with the new one, which is followed by the mixture being poured into a mold to get bottle shape of glass. Finally, the finished products are shipped to retailers and wholesalers for sale.



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Jun 15, 2022   #2
The summary overview is too curt. It needs to be at least 2 interesting sentences long. It does not have a hook that would make the reader interested in what is being reported. It would help if the image identifier were more proper. While this is a picture, it is such a basic tum of no significance to the examiner. It shows a limited vocabulary. Why call ita mere picture when it would be more interesting to refer to an illustrative diagram, a drawn flow chart, or even a directional image? All of these alternative references would have been more marked than just a picture.

The reporting paragraphs are well developed and shows control over a writing style. However, the same cannot be said for the trending statement. That run-on part could have used several sentence presentations to help with information sharing clarity.
jenny7 1 / 2  
Jun 16, 2022   #3
Overall, the process of recycling glass comprises several stages: starting with the collection of used glass items, through different multiple treatment steps, and ending with the final products being delivered to the supermarkets or customers.

At the beginning of the process, glass waste is collected gathered at the collection points, after which it is to be transported by trucks to the factories to be recycled into usable products. Subsequently,(sounds like its after its already recycled)After collection, the glass is cleaned using high pressurizedpressure water to remove all the dirty substances left to be ready for production. After being washed, it is ready for production and classified into three different groups according to its color: brown, green, and clear.

The process continues with the glass being melted in the high-temperature chamber until it becomes liquid form(melted is already describing the state of the glass in a way). RecycledThe liquid glass is then mixed with the new oneglass, which is followed by the mixture beingthen poured into a mold to get the glass into a bottle shape. Finally, the finished bottles are shipped to retailers and wholesalers for sale.
ridzkiekky 3 / 5  
Jun 22, 2022   #4
This introduction is way to short for me. Try to paraphrase the topic.

The process is quite confusing. Try to use first, second, third, or any other sign to make it easier to understand.

Overall, the structure is good. Best of luck!


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