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IELTS TASK 1: Global sales - dvd's, games, cd's over a three-year period


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
May 4, 2014   #1
The chart provides information the changes in the sales of video material or DVDs, games software and CDs around the world in billions of dollars over a three-year period.

In the one hand, in 2000, DVD or video were sold just under 13 billion dollars worth, climbed ever higher to below 22 billion dollars in 2001. Then, it began to rise reached about 27 billion dollars in 2002, and increased sharply in 2003 approximately 30 billion dollars.

In the other hands, between 2000 and 2003 the sale of games software just less than between 12-18 billion dollars. Next, CDs were sold increasing in 2000 by approximately 35 billion dollars, despite it began to fall slightly in 2001. Afterwards, between 2002 and 2003 were sold about 33 billion dollars.

To sum up, between 2000 and 2003, the sale of videos and DVDs rose by approximately 13 billion dollars. The sales of games software also rose during this period, but less sharply. Sales increased from about 13 billion dollars in 2000 to just under 20 billion dollars three years later. By contrast, during the same time period, the sale of CDs fell from 35 billion dollars in 2000 to about 32.5 billion dollars

in 2003.




fikri 5 / 317 71  
May 4, 2014   #2
In the other hands, between 2000 and 2003 the sale of games software just less than between 12-18 billion dollars.

where is the verb?
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 4, 2014   #3
Your essay does not contain with the overview, write the overview without conclusion is better than you make conclusion without overview in Task 1. Despite, if you can make both of them, overview and conclusion, with advance you can achieve sophisticated score. :DD

here mine... Overall, the two categories rose gradually in the overall time, while in the case of CDs sales record a slight decrease towards the end of period.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 6, 2014   #4
This is not a proper overview. In the overview you should not have details :(


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