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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today.


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Apr 15, 2020   #1

Global warming - causes and solutions



Topic title :" Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? "

These days , it is true that global warming is one of the biggest issues which humans are suffering today . this essay will get to the roots of the problem and purpose some feasible solution to it .

It is often believed that global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today . First of all , humans are negatively effective the earth's temperature by burning fossil fuels, cutting down rain-forests. this add an enormous number of greenhouse gases into the atmosphere where heat from the sun is trapped ,Resulting in the greenhouse effect and global warming .Besides , people cutting down trees in order to build houses and infrastructure , which makes the amount of oxygen reduce because trees can absorb carbon dioxide and refresh air .

However , in order to tackle the aforementioned problems, some effective measure should be taken immediately . In other words , governments need to offset carbon footprint from factories and vehicles , and promote alternatives .Also , individuals can play a part by changing their lifestyle . people awareness of using public transport such as bus , subway and soon should be raised . As a result, it can make the air fresher . Moreover , they can reduce the mount of plastic waste much as possible by using the products that are eco-friendly.

In conclusion , although there are many cause leading to global warming is some simple measures should implemented to deal with issues . Additionally . governments and individuals need to make a concerted effort so that they can deal with this problem quickly and effectively.
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Apr 15, 2020   #2
Please remember that in the direct opinion essay, you must outline your discussion points in the first paragraph as the closing sentences of that paraphrased section. A direct question should always receive a direct response from the writer. Failure to do so will result in response formatting deductions.

None of your paragraphs are properly developed. Try to present related ideas in the paragraphs that can be tied together using proper examples and reasoning sentences. You cannot present two topics that do not relate to one another and then just leave it like that. You need to create cohesiveness between the two topics using proper connecting sentences or transition sentences. Using word fillers or 2 sentences that do not really help to make a point in the essay, such as ;

"It is often believed that global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today . First of all , ..."

and,

"However , in order to tackle the aforementioned problems, some effective measure should be taken immediately . In other words ,..."

Directly open the paragraph with the topic sentence instead. That way the reader is immediately informed about what the paragraph will discuss. You can avoid using word fillers if you use the first 5 minutes of this 40 minute task to outline your discussion topics first. That way you will know exactly what you want to discuss in every paragraph, avoiding the need for for word fillers while you think of what you want to say in that section. Outlining your discussion based on:

-Topic
- Reason
- Example
- Supporting reasong

Will always help you create a better discussion per paragraph as opposed to just typing away and hoping that the sentence will make sense. Approach this as an academic writing task. The outline is your best friend.


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