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It's with God's miracle that human miracles are innovate; Human Mind vs. the Computer


Rosamond 3 / 26  
Apr 5, 2009   #1
The Human Mind Versus the Computer

John Dryden, a famous philosopher, once said, "God never made His work for man to mend." Likewise, God never made His work for man to evaluate. The human mind is incomparable; simply because it is the creation of God, whereas the computer are the creation of man. While man's creation is deficient & imperfect, God's creation is infallible & perfect. If the human mind and the computer, however, were ever to be compared, the human mind will undoubtedly emerge victorious.

Technically speaking, the human mind has a hard disk of infinite gigabytes of memory, and its RAM is immeasurable. Its potential of processing power is overwhelming. The Computer, on the other hand, is the cheaper, less efficient imitation of the mind. It is a deficient epitome with finite gigabytes and limited Ram. Furthermore, its processing power can never be mind-boggling, because it is originally made and programmed by the human mind.

Whilst the human mind enjoys the creativity of free limitless response and reactions, the computer is restricted to pre- programmed responses and processes. We, moreover, have the ability to regenerate ourselves as well as machines. Nevertheless, the Computer and all machines in general can only auto-regenerate, if they are programmed to.

Additionally, we tend to praise the amazing inventions and forget about the truly amazing inventor. For instance, we are overwhelmed by the limited capacity of computers, while we forget about the impressive capacity their creator, the human intellect .We forget about that mind that created the concept in the first place, innovated the means, manufactured the hardware and software, arranged chips, assembled wires and connections, and finally plugged everything harmoniously into the wall! It is truly a common human flaw, not giving credit where credit is indeed due!

An interesting point of comparison is portability, in that both the human mind and the computer are portable. While we carry our minds on our shoulders, we carry (portable) computers under our shoulders .Still, the mind excels because we carry our minds spontaneously, as an essential part of our bodies. The Computer, on the other hand, is carried as an additional burden.

To talk about the human mind in such condensing terms, is like compressing a sack of flour into a thimble. We direct much admiration towards an inanimate invention that was once an idea in a brilliant mind, the true point of wonder. Samuel F.B. Morse, the inventor of the electric telegraph, understood that and put it rightly. Upon his successful transmission of the first telegraph message, he cried, "What miracle hath God wrought!" It is with God's miracle that human miracles are innovated.

Questionnaire:

1) Is the article written in good formal English?

2) Are ideas well - arranged? Are there any redundant or out-of-place sentences?

3) If you were to "grade" this work, what would your rating be and why? (For instance, if you choose "C", please note what an "A" grading would require and why this piece did not meet those criteria)

Much obliged.

tasneemspring 3 / 25  
Apr 5, 2009   #2
I think that the ideas are well-arranged, and it is written in a very good English. It has a strong beginning and interesting ending, quite interesting subject.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Apr 5, 2009   #3
the human mind will undoubtedly emerge victorious.

Not always, not in the chess games. :)

Don't capitalize "computer," because it is not a proper noun. Ha ha, my computer's grammar checker caught that, actually! :) So much for human supremacy. :)

Well, as for a grade... this is too simple to get an A. For an A, I would expect to see a paper that told me something I did not know. I already know that my brain is atop my shoulders while my laptop is underneath. For an A, I would expect to learn about research, recent research findings about this very subject.

This definitely gets a B, though, for clarity and structure. It is a solid essay, structurally. As for the argument about God's creation being supreme... I think you should find a few fasinating facts about the brain - and more importantly, about the "mind" which is different from the brain. You should impress the reader with the amazing modern findings about the mind. And cite your sources.
OP Rosamond 3 / 26  
Apr 6, 2009   #4
For an A, I would expect to see a paper that told me something I did not know. I already know that my brain is atop my shoulders while my laptop is underneath. For an A, I would expect to learn about research, recent research findings about this very subject.

I completely agree with your point. My point is: our professors' minds are just too simple to be impressed. We do not learn to impress, but just to "write in correct English" and that's it. I would certainly heed your advise when the time comes.

I Thank you.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Apr 6, 2009   #5
God's creation is infallible & perfect

So . . . God's creation is infallible and perfect
Human beings are God's creation
Human beings are therefore infallible and perfect
As human beings are infallible and perfect, their creations must also be infallible and perfect.
Human beings create computers
Computers are therefore infallible and perfect

Stop me if I've missed something, but I'm pretty sure the above is an inescapable chain of logic that completely destroys most of your opening points. Revise your introduction so that it makes sense.

To that end, you might want to define your key terms. As far as I know, the human mind is only a very complex biochemical computer. It is more advanced than the computer you are reading this on only because organic brains have evolved over 3 billion years, whereas humans have been building computers for only around 40 years. Hardly a fair contest.

"Technically speaking, the human mind has a hard disk of infinite gigabytes of memory, and its RAM is immeasurable. " This is just wrong. If it were true, you would be able to remember what you had for dinner on July 2nd, 2003. Our RAM generally consists of enough space to hold about seven numbers or 1/10th of second of visual input. I may have messed up the numbers here, but that doesn't affect my overall point.

"its processing power can never be mind-boggling, because it is originally made and programmed by the human mind." Again, this does not follow logically. There is no reason why a simpler organism cannot make a more complex one. You wouldn't argue that a statue could never be bigger than a human being because it was made by human hands, would you?

At this point I point I stopped reading your essay. It consists of baseless assertions not grounded in any research into neurology or A.I. programming, and reveals a total lack of logical thought. I'd have to disagree with Kevin and give you an F. I'm assuming that this is meant as an academic essay for a university course of some sort. If it is meant as a personal essay meant to explore your ideas, for, say, a high school course, I'd go considerably higher, C range, probably, as the grammar and style are bearable.
Rajiv 55 / 400  
Apr 6, 2009   #6
Here's an idea I've been trying for a while to find the right words to put in.

Underlying whatever we can only see, is an essence which does not only contain the visible, but -- is -- the universe. It impinges on 'us' and we become aware of ourself. It is one characteristic of 'ourself' that we form a sense of our identity.

The computers coming along is quite a natural evolution in the process -- but the computer will not be creative without our intelligence channeling into it. And I've said above what 'our intelligence' is.
OP Rosamond 3 / 26  
Apr 6, 2009   #7
So . . . God's creation is infallible and perfect
Human beings are God's creation
Human beings are therefore infallible and perfect
As human beings are infallible and perfect, their creations must also be infallible and perfect.
Human beings create computers
Computers are therefore infallible and perfect

Stop me if I've missed something

Well, to begin with, God is unquestionablly Perfect, All Praise to Him.
Secondly, it is God Who created us fallible and imperfect. I derived my argument from the fact that God Himself is perfect, so must be His Work. He chose to make His work that way. Surely God could have made a Super-Human or immortal beings, but we-creatures- can't. That is the point. We, as fallible imperfect creatures, can never produce something perfect, we have no choice about that, our abilities no matter how great are still limited. He made us that way, All Glory be to Him.

I never saw it the way you did. Despite your "logic chain", the fact remains that neither God not His work can ever be compared to His creatures and slaves or their work.The Lord is distinct from His creation in all aspects. There is no room for likening or comparing Him to His creation.

It is with God's permission that we were able to reach what we reached today, anyway.

To that end, you might want to define your key terms. As far as I know, the human mind is only a very complex biochemical computer. It is more advanced than the computer you are reading this on only because organic brains have evolved over 3 billion years, whereas humans have been building computers for only around 40 years. Hardly a fair contest.

See? you admitted it yourself that computers are not to be compared with the Human Mind. Even if they "stand out" in that RAM or chess things, still it is a human mind that programmed them to de so.

Again, this does not follow logically. There is no reason why a simpler organism cannot make a more complex one.

Well, that is not logical! It is true the statue is bigger than his creator, but this is where the miracle lies of God's Creation. That a "simple" organism is the the author of such a complex system. Thanks to that "simple" organism you and I are able to communicate by just plugging, logging and pressing buttons!

Greatness lies in simple yet marvelous effectiveness.

You wouldn't argue that a statue could never be bigger than a human being because it was made by human hands, would you?

No I would not. You have got a point there!

There is no need you get that angry. I have not killed anyone now, have I?
Besides gentleness is a gift, sir, a handsome gift.

Anyway, this is no room for philosophic discussions, because I wrote the essay with only the matter of good language in mind. I was never interested in logic nor philosophy. Indeed some parts you mentioned may be falling logic (I will handle them of course, thank you), yet I just believe in it. You may not ask me how I believe in such "ill-logic", for I would say

It is strange
It is Incomprehensible
Yet marvelous
It is faith

Sorry I am not able to carry on with your logical thoughts. I leave it open to other members who like that kind of dicussion.

I truly appreciate your taking time to assess the work.

Much Obliged, Sir.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Apr 6, 2009   #8
There is no need you get that angry.

I'm not getting angry. You asked me what grade I would give you, and why. I answered your questions, that's all.

I wrote the essay with only the matter of good language in mind. I was never interested in logic nor philosophy.

Well, in that case, see my previous comment, in which I said I would give you a considerably higher grade if the assignment wasn't for a university course. If you are submitting it to a professor, though, you will have to take an interest in logic and philosophy, because professors who assign these sorts of topics tend to take an interest in both, for some strange reason.

In any event, good luck coming up with a second draft.


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