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'many good degrees in Japan'; family background have more influence than teacher


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Apr 13, 2013   #1
Parent and family background have more influence than teacher of a young person's learning and academic achievement. Discuss.

Whether parents and family background have more influence than teacher of a young person's learning and academic remains controversial. Some might claim that this condition is conducive to better future of the youth while others think that more learning and academic encourage the young learner to have the future as they wish. I partly agree with the former idea for the following reasons.

On one hand, there are several benefits if the young person have the good background of parents and family. First, it is believed that the parents and family will help their children to know the fastest way leading to success, avoid the mistakes and waste of time. In Viet Nam, if your parents or your relatives have a good positions in the government, you will be very easy to get a wonderful job after your graduation. Besides, children who was born in the family with high income, if financially provided, will be trying their best to enhance their academic performance and promise more glorious future. No sooner do the children get much money from their family than they don't worry about anything more, can buy all necessary material and only focus on studying. Third, stable mentality is the third advantage of this condition. This, in turn, elevates their belief in yourself, in your future, followed by many successes in not only their studying and career.

On the other hand, the idea of supporting children to cultivate more knowledge and academic achievement is equally beneficial. To some extent, by dint of being inspired to pursue the degrees and study, children can train many skills to be more confident, ready to overcome the troubles in their future and become a successful and respected people. After all, success is not something got within some days, but during one's life-time actually. Such famous people such as Ho Chi Minh, Thomas Edison are telling examples of trying their best from their childhood. Besides, despite spending much time on learning and academic achievement, children fell proud of much money they themselves earn. With outstanding academic performance achieved in the children, their private image is promoted in the workplace while the others using money and relation to apply for a job feel pressured and are not easy to get higher position. Politically speaking, only when all children get much learning and academic achievement can the children become the good citizens and devote more to the society. For example, Japanese have many good degrees, which creates many the quality employees and stimulates the companies in Japan.

In my view, to gain the best, children should try their best to learn and get academic achievements whereas their parents and families bring more help for them.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 14, 2013   #2
Whether parents and family background have more influence than teacher of a young person's learning and academic remains controversial.

Begin your essay with a more catchy line;
Who influence the young person's learning more? Parents or the teachers? This question remains controversial.

Some might claim that this condition is conducive to better future of the youth while others think that more learning and academic encourage the young learner to have the future as they wish.

.... this sentence sounds a bit out of topic... you need to analyse who influence their learning more.... the topic is not about how their future would be successful.... You should align this with your your topic more.


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