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[TOEFL] Should good people are rewarded and bad people are punished in movies or dramas?


scurry 3 / 3 2  
Nov 6, 2013   #1
Topic´╝Ü.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished.

When we watch movies or dramas, some of us like to see good people have a good ending and bad people are punished. While there are also some people who do not like this. Personally, I prefer to see good people get rewarded. However, if the good people always get an happy ending, I don't think it's proper.

First, if all the story end up in the same way, it will be boring .If good people always win , we can guess the ending of the movies or dramas. Then we will feel less interested in them. But if the good people are not always rewarded, we will try to finish the movie or dramas to find out the end of the story. For example, Hollywood stories usually have a happy ending like a hero beats a crime and get a girl. But now many people, including me, have been tired with it. I don't want to see the same kind of ending again and again. So we can't always let good people be rewarded in movies or TV programs.

Even in the real world, good people can get a bad ending sometimes. And I think it happen more often in the real world than in those movies. So if children always watch the TV programs that good people get rewarded, they may think it will be true in the real world. They will be misleading by those movies. And they may act like good people in order to get reward. Once they find the good people are not always get rewarded, they may feel upset and not to be a good person. But in fact, the good people do good things no matter the ending is good or not. So we should tell this to the young children to avoid the misunderstanding.

In fact, those good endings sometimes are helpful. Some people may be encouraged to do good things. But like I said, this kind of behavior won't last long , because someday they will realize the truth. So I suggest we should show people the truth in the stories. And if they can , they will be good people no matter how the story ends.

Based on my arguments above, I think movies and TV programs should present different stories in which good people get reward or get nothing.

If you can make a comment or offer me some suggestions about how to improve my essay I would be so glad. Thank you so much.

Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Nov 6, 2013   #2
When we watch movies or dramas, some of us like to see good people have a good ending and bad people are punished.

.... it's the not good ending your prompt is talking about, but it is about the rewarding good actions and punishing the wrong doing. You should always align your writing with the prompt and should not deviate from its focus.

If good people always win , we can guess the ending of the movies or dramas

If good people always win in story line of every movie or a drama, then it would be too boring.

First, if all the story end up in the same way, it will be boring .If good people always win , we can guess the ending of the movies or dramas.

First, a movie should arouse the interest of its audience and hold their attention tightly. When all the movies end up in the same manner, then the audience would not find them interesting.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Nov 6, 2013   #3
They will be misleading by those movies.

They will be misled by those movies.

And they may act like good people in order to get reward.

.... If they perform good deeds even in hope of being rewarded, that's actually not a bad thing to happen :)

Even in the real world, good people can get a bad ending sometimes...

This body paragraph does not contain any specific example for your reasons. It's important to have examples to support your reasons and you would earn marks on them.
Allen Hu 8 / 26 4  
Nov 6, 2013   #4
So we can't always let good people be rewarded in movies or TV programs.

this sentence lacks a main clause~

They will be misleading by those movies.,And theyand [quote=scurry] may act like good people in order to get reward

ButHowever, in fact, the good people do good things no matter the ending is good or not. So we should tell this to the young children to avoid the misunderstanding.

I think the word "good" is being overused in your essay, you may replace it with other words such as "great, kind,virtuous"

Also, the logic of third paragraph of your essay seems to be confused, may be to revise it~

hope this helps you~


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