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There are good reasons for students to be compelled to wear uniform at schools


khanh ly 1 / -  
Sep 14, 2021   #1

High schools should require students to wear uniforms



These days, almost every school requires students to wear a uniform instead of their own clothes. While there are many people have raised against this trend, there are good reasons for students to be compelled to wear uniform at schools.

Firstly, uniform creates the similarity among students. Wearing a uniform, students will not feel unconfident or compare themselves with others only through clothes. Since students are required to wear uniforms, they do not have to worry about how they look or whether they look good as their friends. Moreover, everyone with the same look will prevent the disparity, which is unnecessary at school, especially in extracurricular activities of the school. In other words, uniforms nourish a sense of equality among students.

Secondly, a uniform is promoting, convenient and affordable to most students and parents. Due to wearing an alike uniform, students do not need to compare themselves with others. Therefore, they will concentrate more on the lessons than on clothes. In addition, uniform brings convenience. Students all need to wake up and go to school early. Consequently, uniforms assist them not to have to spend much indecisive time choosing clothes. Lastly, the uniform is more affordable than many other clothes. We just need two sets of uniforms and wear them throughout the year. As a result, instead of keeping up with the latest trend in fashion, we save our money with uniforms.

In conclusion, students' uniform at school represents their respect to teachers, classmates, and school. With everyone wearing the same clothes, this will shorten the distance among students.
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Sep 15, 2021   #2
The writer will definitely pass the task 2 essay presentation based on this particular topic. He has avoided the use of run on sentences and used transition words properly. All of the discussion topics in the individual paragraphs connect well to one another.Though the discussion is quick and to the point , these are all understandable for the most part. Except, there is one part that is not very well structured sentence-wise.

a uniform is promoting, convenient and affordable to most students and parents

Promoting what? Why should a uniform promote whatever itis? Why? This is a GRA and C + C problem. All sentences need to make clear sense to the reader when considering the connected references.

For the conclusion, do not forget to restate the topic sentence before repeating the personal opinion and reasons. That will create a well rounded and properly concluded discussion summary.
monicaaa0017 4 / 9  
Sep 18, 2021   #3
For the first sentence of the conclusion you can add:

Requiring students to wear a uniform is definitely leading to some good impacts for themselves and their surroundings. Then you can continue with your first original sentence in the conclusion above.


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