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Goods delivered in the United Kingdom by 4 different methods of transport in the period of 1974-2002

lin0208 3 / 3 1  
Feb 3, 2019   #1

Writing task 1: Ielts - Bar Chart

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

My essay:
The mentioned line chart elucidates the quantities of goods delivered in the United Kingdom by 4 different methods of transport in the period of 1974 to 2002.

As can be seen from the graph, the amount of goods transported by road, water, pipeline gradually increased while the mass of goods fetched by rail remained constant at about 40 million tonnes. It is notable that the largest quantities of goods transported in the UK throughout 28 years were delivered by road while the opposite was true for pipeline.

The period between 1978 and 1982 and another between 1990 and 1994 witnessed a slight decrease in the amount of goods transferred by road. It is intriguing that goods delivered by water and rail both declined in this time. However, there was a moderate growth in the aforementioned goods transported by pipeline.

Starting at nearly 40 million tonnes in 1974, the quantities of goods transported by water showed an upward trend, but later went up steadily to reach a peak at more than 60 million tonnes. Many marginal declines of 10 million tonnes were experienced in the amount of goods delivered by rail, nevertheless it stilll reached a plateau at 40 million tonnes.

Thanks for helping me

vipentul 1 / 1  
Feb 3, 2019   #2
Since the graph, itself is not posted, it is hard to judge your writing.

Otherwise, this essay seems to be well structured and have a good vocabulary.
Holt - / 7,529 2001  
Feb 4, 2019   #3
Since you did not provide a copy of the image for review, I can only offer you a general review based on your grammar presentation. I cannot judge your work based on the prompt provided because there is no image to compare your information and other presentation points to. Please remember to provide the image next time to receive a comprehensive review. For now, I can only make the below comments regarding your work:

I realize that you are writing this essay under time constraints but you still have to be careful about the way you write your words. Simple wrong spellings such as an extra L in the word "still" can result in a reduced LR score for you. Always remember to edit and revise your content based upon mistakes you spot after writing the draft. Don't just write the essay then proceed to submit it for a grade. That is the most definite way to fail these types of exams.

Your GRA score will not reach a passing consideration because your paragraphs are overly long run-on sentences. You are combining 2 topics per sentence for some reason, which makes the essay difficult to follow for the reader. The difficulty in keeping track of the discussion will also have a lowering score effect on your C&C score. Every paragraph should have a total of 3-5 sentences that clearly explain related information from each connected information in the image. That is not properly discussed and presented in this essay.

I will limit my advice to these sections of your writing problems for the moment. It is really difficult to assess your work for other quality considerations due to the lack of image. I look forward to reviewing your next Task 1 essay, this time with an uploaded image for comparison and consideration purposes.

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