Hi Furkan!
First of all, I believe your essay is expected to be structured in paragraphs. And a smooth flow between the paragraphs will be appreciated. Also, there are a few grammatical mistakes.
there are a lot of vehicles in roads.
there are a lot of vehicles
on the roads
vehicles cause air pollution because their exhaust release harmful gas to the outdoor
vehicles cause air pollution because
they release harmful
gasesinto the
surroundings/atmosphereThe gas can cause ...
These gases can cause ...
vehicles should be designed to give you less damage to the environment
vehicles should be designed
such that the damage to the environment is reducedthey don't want to hold on road.
they don't want to be
held up on the road
I think that people don't use the horn unless necessary.
This statement is unnecessary
forms of transportation which is less harmful
alternative forms of transportation which
are less harmful
Also,bicycle encourages people to make sport.
I don't understand this statement. If you mean you can have a bicycle race, then it is possible even with other forms of transport. It doesn't strengthen your cause.
using vehicles can transport a lot of people despite that personal vehicles like a car can transport only 5 people.
public transport vehicles can accommodate a lot of people
while personal vehicles like a car can transport only 5 people.
To sum up,in the light of this information it is important that people aware of this issue and goverment should write laws for using vehicles and on everybody should follow them.
To sum up,in the light of this information it is important that people
are aware of this issue and
thegovernment should write laws for using vehicles and
on everybody should follow them.
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As such, you have summed up the points concerned with the cons of the increased vehicle usage. But your introduction and the conclusion are pretty weak. It is better to introduce your topic in a context - say based on some quote or some personal experience.
Also, you have talked about your views about increase in the vehicle usage but very little about the government enforcement in this regard.
Try to work on these points and lets see what you come up with!
Cheers
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