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IELTS TASK 2: Government should build more nuclear power plant as it is eco friendly.


ratree 3 / 11  
Mar 16, 2011   #1
Government should build more nuclear power plant as it is eco friendly but other people oppose this view. Describe the both sides of view and the give your opinion.

Please help by checking my Ielts writing:

My ANSWAR:

Nowadays, nuclear energy is a well known term. In the meantime whether it is a blessing or curse has a sparked heated debate. Some people support that atomic power has a fundamentally beneficial influence in our lives. While, other contend that it has a detrimental effect as well. However, after analysing the merits and demerits of nuclear energy, here I will not support the government to build more nuclear power plants.

One of the most significant benefits of nuclear energy is that it becomes an alternative source of energy when other natural resources like oil, coal, gas has become scarce. Nuclear reaction releases a million times more energy , as compared to hydro or wind power which now generates electricity. Moreover, very less fuel is required by nuclear power plant to produce energy compared with other fossil fuels. Furthermore, nuclear energy has been justified as a cut of carbon dioxide emissions and thereby counters the effect of climate change. By using nuclear power, it is possible to prevent the devastating effect of global warming caused by contemporary energy sources .Another compelling reason of building nuclear power plant is that it requires very small space, even possible to built nuclear village in a small restricted area.

There are, however, equally strong arguments against the development of nuclear power plant. Perhaps, the most dangerous things of nuclear plant is that its expulsion of radiation which is more hazardous for both human and environment. By damaging human cell it only makes people sick but also may become the cause of death. The devastating effect of radiation may last for a long time. For example, during the World War II, 1945 Hiroshima and Nagashaki, the two cities of Japan were affected by nuclear bombing where 2 million people died within a week of attack but still genetically defected child are born there due to the result of nuclear radiation. In addition to, the highly radioactive waste emitted from nuclear power plant is very hazardous. Once released, it lasts for tens of thousands of years before decaying to safe level. It is also supported that for terrorists, nuclear plants would be the highest target zone to disrupt power supply and devastate the entire region. Nuclear weapons from nuclear energy can be another thread for entire mankind. Another strong reason against nuclear power plant is that it requires large capital cost and around 15-20 years time, professional handling, costly uranium are required to build a single nuclear plan.

In conclusion, after analyzing of pros and cons of nuclear energy it is clearly seen that nuclear plant have a lot of negative effects on this world. Thereby it is suggested that instead to develop nuclear power plant; government should think any other alternative eco friendly sources of energy like wind, tidal power.

OP ratree 3 / 11  
Mar 17, 2011   #2
Thanks a lot.
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Mar 17, 2011   #3
Hi Ratree,
U have written a very decent essay. However, I would like to tell u few more points to u-
- there r few grammatical errors (minute) ones which have been pointed n rectified by the person who replied before me.
- instead of bombardment of hiroshima n nagasaki, u can write chernobyl nuclear accident n also the recent accident in japan where people r facing the death.

- nuclear energy is a very effective source, but whats the use of such a source which can eradicate or deform the whole human society in case of an accident.

- rest , I would say that ur essay is really damn good.
Good luck n cheers :-)
OP ratree 3 / 11  
Mar 17, 2011   #4
Thanks Ajit for your nice suggestion.I wil follow them.
Thanks a lot
BrookW 4 / 12  
Mar 26, 2011   #5
Hi Ratree,

You really did very good jobs in opening and discussion of both views, but being a reader, I am not convinced by your conclusion in the last paragragh. As you stated in the 2nd paragragh, the nuclear plant also have a lot of positive effects on this world, how can you assert that it should not be supported. I think it's better to do some comparation between the both views and then give your final opinion.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 29, 2011   #6
Use a hyphen: well-known

Some people assert that atomic power has ...

Use "while" in the middle of a long sentence:
a fundamentally beneficial influence in our lives, while other contend that it has

Therefore, it is suggested that instead of developing nuclear power plants government should think about other eco-friendly sources of energy, like wind, tidal power, and solar power.

:-)


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