IELTS; government´control on water´using.

Some people think they have right to use as much fresh water as they want，others，otherwise believes governments should strictly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In a world where customers always rights,the controlling own needs can be necessary. One of the most important necessities for a human is the water supply. Although some argue in favour of unlimited using, others consider this resource should be regulated by the authority. As this discussion is an imperative issue for humanity, I will analyze both sides before providing a reasonable conclusion.

To begin with, there appears to be an argument over the people' notion that it is their right to spent as much water as they wish. When ordinary people pay for this service, they deserve to measure their limit on their own. It would be unfair to control people' action toward water' using by the government, as they have legal rights to use it. Hence, the position of people who support water supply without restriction is understandable.

On the other hand, it is a well-known fact that many people around the world are struggling because of the deficiency of water. In this case, the government organisations which jurisdiction is the providing of water resources have to regulate the frequency of water'using. Through the implementation of such policy a local society will certainly benefited. As an illustration of this strategy is African cultures. In these regions,the majority of population suffered without clean water,however, since the certain authorities have endeavored to seriously control this resource, a regional populace experiences an improvement in comparative terms. Thus, the imperative objective of the government in regard to regulating water resources can be seen.

To sum up, after analyzing both views, it is agreed that the state must manage such crucial resource, as long as it is shortage for population. Therefore, it is hoped that people who can afford themselves to get extra water supply will be put in the same position as destitute ones in terms of water' using.

This has grammatical issues and your next sentence is better to open an introduction.


fresh water usage


I think you had better state your opinion in your introduction.


This part is really confusing.


the use of water

Hi,..

After I read your writing, then the commentary on your board has been raised, like you did in my previous post.

Here we go:


If I were you, I'd like to write will be obviously benefited

Anyway, it is a good composition I've ever read.

Good luck !

Thanks for all


Yes,you are right, howeverIi cannot find a way to express my opinion in the intro and at the same time save a further discussion for both sides.

Could you please give me an example?

Hi Eddies,your feedback is more than welcome.

Sure, you can write it in a simple way, for example:
Although some people are in favour of unlimited using, others, myself included, think that fresh water usage should be controlled by the authority.
Hope this helps!

Wrong grammar - It should be ;
customers always have rights OR customers are always right
This is not a strong hook. It doesn't seem like a logical sentence :(


There is no harm in expressing your opinion and then move into the body paragraphs to discuss both views.


You have a problem with expressing ideas clearly. Do not bother about vocabulary. First, make simple clear sentences that gives your ideas across to the reader with better clarity!

Hi Znack,
I feel the below introduction may be appropriate to express our postion / opinion.

Water is an incredible natural resource gifted by God, without which survival of any living organism highly impossible. Despite the fact, some people contend that they have full privilege to use fresh water without any restrictions, whereas, others argue that government's endeavor is needed to monitor the consumption of water. In my view, people should be considerate by not using water lavishly in order to avoid jeopardize circumstances.

Thanks for your feedback.

What if I will change this hook on the following:
In a world where customers are always right,there might be a necessity to control their demands.

As an example of alternative topic sentence: For some,water is considered as one of the basic resources,which people should waste at their will.

I have rewrote the intro and first para in the essay:
Please, check it for correct structure, as well as grammar issues.

If the government controls clean water, the entire world will benefits. Despite the fact that many people around the world struggling with the deficiency of such crucial resource, there are some who argue against that authorities should regulate water's usage. In my opinion, I disagree over the view that people have right to waste clean water without limits.

For one, who believe that they are eligible to use water at their will, claim that the amount of clean water should be depended solely on the payment of the bills. When people pay their taxes, they should be able to expect service without any restriction. For example, in most European cultures, people know the cost for the defined amount of water and as a result the government's interaction on their personal matters will look negatively from their perspective. Hence, it can be seen why some people consider the control of clean water by the government as a wrong idea.

If the government controls clean water, the entire world will benefits --> If the government controls clean water usage, the entire world will be benefited.

Your writing is good enough in this two paragraph. Thanks for the sentences.

Hey. Thanks for commenting on my essay. After reading through all the comments, there really isn't anything more to contribute.
I think all the posters above have done a good job of critiquing your essay. If there is another essay you need help with, please let me know.

Good luck!