IELTS Writing Task 1: The government expenditure in 2010 and 2015

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The given pie chart makes a comparison of the government's spending on nine various areas between 2010 and 2015.

It is clear that, while education accounted for the majority of the expenditure, others contained the lowest percentage in both years.

As can be seen from the chart, the four most enormous fields that the government spent were as follows: education, healthcare, pensions, and defence. Almost a quarter of expenditure was for education in 2010 and about one - fifth in 2015. The most striking point to note is that the figure for pensions was remained steady, at 19% in the following five years. At the same time, defence experienced a considerable drop from 17% to 14%.

Out of the nine areas, the proportion of welfare and interest on borrowing was the only which saw a dramatic rise, by exactly 5% from 8% and 5% respectively. On the other hand, transport, culture and leisure and other took up 6% of the expenditure in total in 2010, as doubled as the figure in the next five years.

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Grammar issues:

... leisure and others took up 6% ...

This essay is reasonably good whether on grammar or architecture viewpoint. You are likely to get an above-band score.

Your summary overview does not contain complete information. The 9 areas of comparison in relation to the comparison years should be presented. You also did not reference the measurement type in the summary, which is a required presentation. There is no clear trending statement indicated in your presentation as well. You have at least two run on sentences in this presentation. Some of your presentations do not complete the 3 sentence minimum requirement for each paragraph. You are using words of uncertainty in the essay when each measurement is given precisely in the pie charts. Your presentation could have been better and, contrary to the above scoring assumption, students are not allowed to score fellow students at this forum because students are not qualified nor trained to score these essays, you did not write an above average scoring essay.

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