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IELTS:Should the government pay for medical care and education?


vena9000 1 / 1  
Jan 13, 2011   #1
Q) Should government pay for medical care and education? Why?

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State officials and general public have been contemplating for years about the pros and cons of relying solely on the government for funding of medical care and education without reaching any definite conclusion. In my opinion, we should achieve a balance between individuals and authorities.

Firstly, funding of medical care relying solely on government may lead to adverse consequence. The advent of aging society means enormous expenditure of medical authorities. Even though the government can shoulder the economic burden, they must resort to the taxes which mostly collected from the young generation and middle-aged. Maybe the rate of tax will be increased, which will definitely do harm to the society as a whole, especially the young people whose income isn't large enough.

In terms of the educational funding, the cost should be balanced between the families and the educational authorities. Particularly, the education should be divided into basic education and higher education. For the purpose of driving out progress toward a better life both personally and collectively, the basic education should be received by every child. In order to achieve it, government should take most part or even all the cost of basic education. As to the higher education, individuals can shoulder more of the economic burden. Overall, the balance of educational cost should depends on different situations. But, as the well-educated individuals are not only prepared for the well-paying jobs, but they are also able to cope with the dramatic changes of the world, the countries need those people to develop. Without large number of well-educated persons, a country's capacity to grow would be diminished.

In summary, the cost of medical care and education should be properly distributed between the citizens and their government. Furthermore, government should make out a appropriate proportion of it and ensure the enforcement.
charpay_k 5 / 13  
Jan 15, 2011   #2
State officials and general public have been contemplating for years about the pros and cons of relying solely on the government for funding of medical care and education without reaching any definite conclusion. In my opinion, we should achieve a balance between individuals and authorities.(I think you can improve your opening to attract your readers. It seems to be just a normal background.)

Firstly('firstly' is informal ), funding of medical care relying solely on(maybe you can change an expression) government may lead to adverse consequence. The advent of aging society means enormous expenditure of medical authorities. Even though the government can shoulder the economic burden, they must resort to the taxes which mostly collected from the young generation and middle-aged. Maybe the rate of tax will be increased, which will definitely do harm to the society as a whole, especially the young people whose income isn't large enough.

In terms of the educational funding, the cost should be balanced between the families and the educational authorities. Particularly, the education should be divided into basic education and higher education. For the purpose of driving out progress toward a better life both personally and collectively, the basic education should be received by every child. In order to achieve it, government should take most part or even all the cost of basic education. As to the higher education, individuals can shoulder more of the economic burden. Overall, the balance of educational cost should depends on different situations. But, as the well-educated individuals are not only prepared for the well-paying jobs, but they are also able to cope with the dramatic changes of the world, the countries need those people to develop. Without large number of well-educated persons, a country's capacity to grow would be diminished.(your structure is complex, or rather, unclear. It is important to organize your essay logically and reasonably. Also, I consider that your ideas are good but not enough to support your points.)

In summary, the cost of medical care and education should be properly distributed between(Please check whether this expression is correct) the citizens and their government. Furthermore, government should make out a appropriate proportion of it and ensure the enforcement.

PS. I am also a student having taken IELTS. I hope my advice could help you though I am still a fledgling. :)
OP vena9000 1 / 1  
Jan 20, 2011   #3
thank youO(∩_∩)O~
your advice is useful to me. sometimes, i can't organize the structure well. are you from china?
lippea 3 / 7  
Jan 20, 2011   #4
A blank line between paragraphs makes it easier to ready.


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