A task 2 essay assesses the everyday English vocabulary of the test taker. While having a wide vocabulary is good for the LR score, the use of advanced, profession specific vocabulary tends to lower the LR score so using
enunciate
and
concur
did not help the essay score. It does not feel natural to read these words in an everyday conversational essay. Ordinary word usage would have scored better. Never atsome that this is a vocabulary knowledge test because it is not. Other than that, the restatement and opinion presentation works well. The response format is correct.
The use of
On the other hand
is only applicable when writing comparative essays. That is because the paired phrases (On the one hand) go hand in hand in individual paragraph development. It cannot be properly used in a single opinion essay. Regardless, the reasoning paragraphs are properly targeted and presented.
can't
Always spell out the whole word to avoid GRA scoredowns due to the use of contractions. An academically unacceptable writing practice.
the conclusion would have worked better if it had followed the 2 sentence, 40 word format instead of this run-on sentence. It just doesn't allow for proper sentence style mixing for GRA benefits.