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Government should take the responsibility to make appropriate regulation about the dangerous sports


heylie 1 / -  
Aug 11, 2014   #1
There is a wide variety of sports in people's life. Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned by the government,while the others believe that sports should be

chosen freely.

The government should regulate activities which public participate in. Though sports has a number of benefits, sometimes it pose risks to people, which may cause injuries or even death. There are a few cases that skiers died accidentally every year. And injuries, such as leg broken, are more common in such kind of extreme sports. Moreover, it is a burden for the government to give more medical and rescuing service to those who are trapped or injured because of the dangerous sports.

However, people are supposed to have the right and freedom to choose sports activities they like. Although some sports will increase risks, it will still bring along joy and excitement to people.For instance, bungee jumping is an extreme sports related to high risk, however,it is still popular among young people because it can give physically and psychologically stimulation to people. Some people view extreme sports as a particular method for them to release the pressure. Their options are reasonable and should not be banned.

In my opinion, the government should take the responsibility to make appropriate regulation about the dangerous sports,such as age limitation, to prevent the prospective danger. However, the freedom to choose sports should not be interfered. People should own their rights to enjoy different kinds of sports.

tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Aug 11, 2014   #2
You don't have thesis statements.
ex: I believe that both arguments have different perspectives. please write the complete prompt, as a reader I cannot make sure your task responses is true or not.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 11, 2014   #3
There is a wide variety of sports in people's life.

Actually, people engage in a wide range of sports. So, I like if you change this sentence to;
People in engage in an array of sports.

The government should regulate activities which public participate in.

Well, your topic is about dangerous sports activities and you should have focused on that.
However, people are supposed to have the right and freedom to choose sports activities as they like.


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