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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal.



winiari 1 / -  
Jun 5, 2025   #1
It would be argued by some that economic development is the main aim, while others believe that other equivalent patterns of progress are also essential for a country. In this essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is drawn.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that economic development is the most important target. To begin, a strong economy makes a country wealthier and stronger, enabling it to compete with other countries. It is also seen as a criterion that evaluates a country's resilience, so it plays a vital role. To be specific, economic growth brings a better life for people in that country because, if the economy increases, residents' incomes will increase. So, citizens easily access facilities such as hospitals, schools, supermarkets, or even enjoy their own entertainments-this provides convenience for them, making their lives happier. Moreover, with higher living standards, more career opportunities are created for people. As a result, homelessness and the slum rate will be reduced significantly; people do not have to think too much about finances when their income is gradually improved.

On the other hand, others would argue that other aspects of progress are also important to focus on. First of all, cultural progress is a vital component that contributes to a country's development; culture advertises the country and its people to the world, attracting investment and tourism, as well as establishing a cultural identity and uniting communities. Furthermore, education is a foundation for sustainable development because it enhances knowledge, training a high-quality workforce; hence, a country that wants long-term development needs people of great learning, skills, and creativity.

In conclusion, both perspectives have their own merits and drawbacks. I believe that not only the economy but also other types of progress are important, and to ensure that development is balanced, we should be aware of the importance of all these aspects and maintain them properly.(
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15676  
Jun 5, 2025   #2
In this essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is drawn.

You have changed the discussion prompt and therefore, failed the Tast Accuracy section of the scoring rubic. The paraphrase and instruction should have reflected that you were asked to deliver a restatement of the 2 public opinions and then your personal opinion. Nowhere in the original instruction was "drawing a conclusion" ever given as a writing instruction for this prompt. The task 2 essay will only as that opinions be given, the writer will never be asked to draw a conclusion. This error almost assures that this essay will not receive a passing score since majority of the grade is awarded within the TA section.

The essay is also overwritten. You wrote more than 300 words for a 40 minute task. The maximum word count that will assure that you finish discussing the essay is 300 words. In an actual test setting, this essay would be open ended and receive an automatic failing score. You have to time yourself when writing to ensure that you properly conclude, review, and revise your essay during the actual test.


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