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Grade is an assessment that encourages students to learn more.do you agree?


divya2010 3 / 4  
Sep 2, 2010   #1
Grade is an assessment of the kind of work a student has done. Teachers usually judge students on the basis of their grades. A good student certainly has better grades than a bad student. Students also judge their capability on the basis of the grades they are given. Better grades indicate better work. I completely agree that grades do encourage the students to learn and work more.

Grades develop a competitive spirit among students. When I see my friends getting better grades in a subject, even I am compelled to work more and get good grades. It's human nature to want everything that others have. Better grades show the interest a student has in a particular subject. Zeal to work more creeps in. Sincerity towards work increases and self confidence boosts up.

Generally, students with good grades attract attention. Other students seek their advice and take help from their notes. Once a student gets a better grade, he strives to give his best. Parents feel proud of their children and encourage them to work more. Students realise the importance of hard work in life. They try to excel in everything they do. Also, to pursue a career of their own choice a student needs good grades in the lower classes and this encourages him/her.

Certain demerits of the grade system are that it segregates the students based on their grades. Students with good grades don't mingle with the ones with low grades. Students are discouraged when they work hard and end up with a low grade. This is discouraging and lowers the morale of the student and their enthusiasm fades away.

The merits of the grading system out way its demerits and hence it is relevant to say that grades encourage students to learn more.

ryutei133 5 / 24  
Sep 2, 2010   #2
...I am compelled to work harder and try to get higher scores ...
However, certain demerits....
Though the grading system has some negative effects, the merits of it outweigh its demerits...

Zeal to work more creeps in. Sincerity towards work increases and self confidence boosts up.

Somehow these two sentences sound a little awkward to me... Maybe they were not written clearly enough to support your view?? I really don't know...@@...

To me, the conclusion seems a little bit rush. It is not "the grading system" has more advantages that encourages students to learn more. Maybe you could list the specific merits you've explained above in brief before you draw the conclusion.

Wish my views could help. ^_^
cf1916 5 / 13  
Sep 4, 2010   #3
At the beginning, your essay is attractive and content-wise.

However, I dont really like the second last paragraph.
It seems that you have rebuted "encouragement to low level students" and "persistent of high level students" mentioned at the beginning of your essay.

I think you should not use it as a demerit point or your work will sound a little bit strange.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Sep 4, 2010   #4
Here is the way to follow the rule called 'number agreement'
Keep singular with singular and plural with plural:
Grade are assessments of the kind of work a ...
or
A grade is an assessment of the kind of work a...
YOU CHOOSE THE way you like it, but keep it either singular or plural.

Certain demerits of the grade system are that it segregates the students based on their grades. -- this is a good point, but it is written in an awkward way.

One drawback of the grade system is that it segregates the students based on their grades.

Nice job!


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