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Toefl essay: Grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn


lizzielu17 1 / -  
Feb 12, 2010   #1
Do marks encourage students to study? The discussion of this issue among individuals and in society as a whole has become debatable during the last decade. Some people declare that students' confidence and interests may get hurt if they get unsatisfying marks in study. However, when it comes to me, grades can give encouragement to students in learning as long as they are treated properly.

First of all, students' grades (marks) are given by a designed testing and scoring system with relatively objective criterions. Helping students know their weakness and advantage by marking is one of the core functions of the system. The high marks show the knowledge which is well grasped, while the low ones reflect some parts you have to improve. Take myself as an example, in my last Toefl Test, the poor score in "Speaking" shown that my oral needed improvement. So practicing speaking became more important in preparation of the test this time. It is the grades that help students know themselves better and make more effort to strengthen their weakness.

Another equally essential fact is that student's competitive nature, which is inspired by grades (marks), will at the same time stimulate learning more knowledge. Human beings are always longing for winning. The willing to have the highest score in class intimates many students to work harder and harder. During the process of competition, all the students get improvement. Had there not been marks, students would not have such motivation to study.

Last but not least, grades give students a clear goal. Performing better next semester is always written in New Year's resolution, but "better performance" can not be measured without grades. If a student promises to get straight-A next test, he or she knows what does it mean and how much time should be spent on studying in order to reach the goal.

Taking into account all the aspects shown above, we can safely draw the conclusion that grade is a proper motivation encourages students to learn, for the reason that it helps students know their advantages and disadvantages, that it makes students learn through competing, and that it gives students a clear goal.

(Thanks a lot!)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 12, 2010   #2
The first paragraph is excellent!
However, as far as I am concerned, grades can give encouragement to students in learning as long as they are treated properly.

with relatively objective criteria.

Take my experience as an example; in my last TOEFL Test, the poor score in "Speaking" showed that my oral needed improvement.

Nice job, you write better than MANY native speakers of English. Better than most of us, actually.

Taking into account all the points made above, we can safely draw the conclusion that grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn. Grades for the reason that it helps help students know their advantages and disadvantages, make students learn through competing, and give students a clear goal.

:-)
Poojasugandhi 18 / 35  
Feb 17, 2010   #3
Hi,
very well written, but i am not clear with your conclusion para.
it helps students know their advantages and disadvantages, you didnt mention about the disadvantages in your essay. If I am not wrong it should mention that grades make student learn about their weaknesses in particular area.


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