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My grandma has made a lot for our family - essay


huybinh111 2 / 3 1  
Jan 2, 2013   #1
I'm ..., I live in Can Duoc District with my family. I go to Ben Luc District to visit my grandma every month. She is very friendly and approachable. She usually has taught her grandchildren how to be a good person and have a good manner. And she also told us about ... her youth.

She was born and grew up in Can Guoc District. When she was 17, she fell in love with a classmate. They stayed in loved for years, but they weren't allowed to marry to each other. Then, their love was broken. For many years later, my grandma met my grandpa when she was a accountant in a small company. He took care of her carefully and made my grandma fell in love again. They married and had a happy life with six children. Unfortunately, my grandpa passed away several years ago. So, she has lived with her daughters - my aunt.

I really admire my grandma about what she had made for family and I. And I also love her. whenever you meet her, you'll feel comfortable because of her gray hair and a fairy smile. I wish she could always be healthy to live with us

katev 18 / 120 24  
Jan 2, 2013   #2
What is the prompt? This is sweet and all, but I know nothing about you. I don't think you even mentioned yourself once other than how much you love your grandmother.

If this is an influential person essay, you need to say how she influenced you.

She usually has taught her grandchildren how to be a good person and have a good manner

She has taught her grandchildren good manners and things it takes to be a good person (You can mention yourself here)

made my grandma fell in love again

grandma fall in love again

So, she has lived with her daughters - my aunt

she has lived with her daughters, my aunts

I really admire my grandma about what she had made for family and I

I truly admire my grandma for all that she has made for my family

And I also love her. whenever you meet her

I love her. Whenever you meet her...


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