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The graph depicts the proportion of releasing carbon dioxide from each citizen among four nations


sassyna 1 / 1  
Jan 4, 2022   #1

CO2 emissions per person in the UK



The graph depicts the proportion of releasing carbon dioxide from each citizen among four nations over a period of 40 years

Overall, we can observe that there was a significant upward trend in Italy and Portugal while as opposed, the UK and Sweden experienced a downward of CO2 emissions.

Regards Italy, it started at over 4 metric tonnes at the beginning of the time but then slightly rosed to more than 6 metric tonnes in the next 10 years. Moreover, Italy constantly increased to 2 units in 1997 and maintained the same till the end which was nearly 8 metric tonnes. When we look at Portugal, the similarity was existing. At first, it was under 2 metric tonnes but then went up remarkably after four decades being peak of nearly 6 metric tonnes, three times more than beginning.

In contrast, the UK and Sweden witnessed the opposite tendency. The UK was the highest contributor in releasing carbon dioxide reaching around 10 metric tonnes. However, it slowly went down to approximately 8 metric tonnes in 2007. With respect to Sweden, it fluctuated from more than 8 metric tonnes up to more than 10 but decreased rapidly to nearly 6 metric tonnes in the next three decades.



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Jan 4, 2022   #2
The summary presentation is worrisome of these presentation paragraphs as you failed to deliver the minimum 3 sentence count for the summarized report. There are also missing punctuation marks in this section. Even if you combined the summary with the trending statement, it still would not have met the minimum sentence requirement for the paragraph. Always write between 3-5 sentences per paragraph. You could have added a reference to the timeline or period of measurement to help achieve the 3 sentence count, and added relevant information to the summary.

While the grammar does not have perfect English, it shows some control over sentence formations. Enough control over the words to allow you to create grammatically imperfect, but understandable sentences and paragraphs. So you will not get a failing score for the essay, but it will not be a high scoring essay either. You have done enough correct work to achieve a basic passing mark.
OP sassyna 1 / 1  
Jan 4, 2022   #3
@Holt
Thank u so much for commenting <3
nhmt 3 / 5 1  
Jan 18, 2022   #4
In your third paragraph, you use "at the beginning of the period" rather than "at the beginning of the time".
In your second paragraph, you should use "experienced a downward trend" because "downward" is not a suitable noun to be used in this context.


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