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The graph illustrates immigration, emigration and net migration rate in the UK from 1999 to 2008


nhantd97 1 / 1  
Dec 19, 2020   #1

[Writing task 1] International migration in UK



The graph illustrates immigration, emigration and net migration rate in the UK from 1999 to 2008.

Overall, the rates of immigration and emigration in the UK rose between 1999 and 2008, but the figures for immigration were significantly higher. It is clear that the net migration rate was positive over the period shown and peaked in 2004 and 2007.

In 1999, over 450,000 people came to live in the UK, while the number of people who emigrated stood at just under 300,000. The immigration rate rose sharply in 2004 and peaked at 600,000 in 2006. However, the emigration rate saw a decline in 2007 before increasing to the highest point of about 420,000 people in the next year.

The net migration figure was about 180,000 in 1999, and it remained at a similar level until 2003. The UK net migration reached a peak of almost 240,000 in 2004 and 2007 before falling back to 180,000 in 2008.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,846 4177  
Dec 19, 2020   #2
There is only one image presented in this discussion. Therefore, the presentation should be completed over 3 paragraphs. You do not have enough information to present that would benefit from a 4 paragraph presentation. The insistence on creating a 4 paragraph format left your summary overview incomplete and underwhelming in presentation. You failed to provided pertinent information in the summary section, which would have had a direct effect on your TA score.

Missing from your summary overview are:
- References to the title of the chart (Long- Term Migration, UK, 1999-2008)
- Measurement type indicator (Thousands)
- Proper graph identification (Line graph)

Do your best to use a uniform sentence number presentation in your paragraphs. You must present a minimum of 3 sentences, which is the minimum requirement for an academic writing paper. Your summary overview and third paragraph do not meet these minimum requirements. So your TA score, based on your word count, does not meet the maximum scoring possibility for your presentation based on the TA requirements.
OP nhantd97 1 / 1  
Dec 19, 2020   #3
@Holt
Thanks for your feedback.


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