The graph illustrates the renovation of a city hospital road between 2007 and 2010

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The graph illustrates the renovation of a city hospital road between 2007 and 2010. Overall, the modifications are seen in the car park and the hospital road.

In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by the ring road which connected with the car park on the southern side for both staff and the public. The hospital road was next to the car park and some bus stops. This road was connected with an intersection with the city road.

In 2010, the old car park is just available for staff and a new car park for the public have been built on the east connecting with the ring road. The bus stops have been demolished and replaced with a bus station which is located on the south-western side of the city hospital. There are two new roundabouts connecting the hospital road with the hospital, the city road, and also the bus station.

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The graph illustrates the renovation of a city hospital road between 2007 and 2010. Overall, the modifications are seen in the car park, the bus stop, and the hospital road.

In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by the ring road which connected with the hospital road to the east. There was a common car park on the left side and three bus stops on each side of the hospital road. This road connected to an intersection with the city road.

In 2010, several changes could be witnessed. A new car park was built on the east of the hospital for the public only, leaving the old one for the staff. The bus stops had been demolished and replaced with a bus station which was located near the hospital road to the western side. There were two roundabouts which were constructed at the north and the south of the hospital road, connecting it with the ring road, the city road, and also the newly-built bus station.