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# The graph presents information about comparison of spending on petrol between people in the UK & USA

Jan 5, 2017   #1

## US and British income proportion intended for the petrol spendings

The graph presents information about comparisson of spending on petrol between people in the United States and United Kingdom which is based on income. It is noticeable that in United Kingdom, the number of income determine the proportion of petrol spending. Conversely, in United State, wealthier people append less budget on petrol than poorer people.

Looking at the graph, the poorest people in United States spent more than 5 % of their budget for petrol which is twice than proportion of income than poorest people in UK spend on petrol. On the other hand, middle class in UK spend 3,5 % of their income on petrol which is 1 % lower than proportion of spending for petrol by middle class in United States. People with the highest income also follow similar pattern, while the rich people in UK spent 3,5 % of their expenditure, the wealthiest people in US only spent 2,5 % of their expenditure on petrol. It means that higher income in UK leads to higher spent on petrol. Meanwhile, higher income in United States leads to lower spent on petrol.

Jan 5, 2017   #2
Hi Gri

I found some past words which is not mentioned the year on the line graph explanation. It preferable to use spent to spend Mostly those words on the second paragraph.
Jan 18, 2017   #3
hello @gribigribi
United States and United Kingdom which is based
the number of income determines the proportion
United States spentspend more than => I found similliar problem in second paragraph as well
Jan 19, 2017   #4
Grienda, for starters, always remember to include a copy of illustration that your report is based on when you post an essay for review. For an accurate review of your work, we need to be able to compare your information with the actual data sent to you. Otherwise, we have no ability to properly consider the information and presentation in your essay.

I am not sure why you are using a comma instead of a period in presenting your percentage figures. Are you presenting these in the thousands of percent or something? See, this is why we need the illustration. Also, your presentation is too short. You must present 3 paragraphs for this sort of essay at a minimum.

Always double check your information and the way that you form your sentences. Keep in mind that you are scored on grammar accuracy and lexical resource use. I believe that you would lose points in this essay for mistakes in those areas. I am unable to properly assess the possible scores you can receive in those areas because of the lack of complete information coming from you.

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