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IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the average GDP growth


eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 18, 2014   #1
The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

Answer:

The given bar chart shows the average GDP growth per decade for wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers over a period of 40 years.

According to the data, after a ten-year period of the average GDP growth for wealthy countries, the figure decreased steadily from the 1970s to 90s, while globalisers showed the reserve during 40 years. Meanwhile, non-globalisers were a period of fluctuation for the annual GDP growth over 4 decades.

A closer look at the data reveals that the highest percentage of the GDP growth was recorded from wealthy countries with 4.8% per annum. However, this trend fell to 3% per year between 1970s and 90s. Then, it continued falling to a low of two per cent at the end of this period. Secondly, in the 1960s the average GDP growth for globalisers was approximately 1.5 per cent, and then doubled in the 1970s, with nearly 3%. This figure continued to rise in the 1980s with 3.3% of the GDP growth, not leveling off until the 1990s, which had led the GDP figures for the wealthy countries. Lastly, non-globalisers were a slight increase in the first two decades, with 2.3-to-3.1 per cent. By the 1980s this figure decreased dramatically, just less than 1%, although it recovered slightly towards the end of the year, with 1.3% of the GDP growth.

Clearly, the average GDP growth from 3 different types of countries had changed considerably during 4 decades.




SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Jan 18, 2014   #2
I'll recommend you to make comparison for each group in the conclusion statement
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Jan 19, 2014   #3
Well, I think you follow the most appropriate structure which is the Introduction, Over view and Details. Your sentences, vocabulary, grammar, all that sound perfect and I think you've done a good job with this title. If you handled time effectively for this task, then you are ready to take up this task and can concentrate more on other tasks :)
OP eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 19, 2014   #4
Thanks Dumi. You have spent your time to mark my writing and gave me some notable feedback and the suggestion for "handled time". I really appreciate it. Well, as suggested, I try to beat the time, even though I am the new one dealing with this report writing, as to prepare my IELTS exam.


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