The graph below shows the percentage of people in the different age group who went to the cinema

uk data on attending cinema by age

The line chart compares the share of four age groups attending cinema once a month in Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

Overall, apart from the 7-14-year-old group, three other ones experienced a vast escalation during the 17-year period. Additionally, people whose ages range between 15 and 24 took up the highest proportion, while the opposite was true for the middle-aged group.

Commencing at about 18% in 1984, a massive growth was seen in the percentage of 15-24-year-old individuals, reaching its highest peak of approximately 60% in 2000. Likewise, the figure for people who are 35 or older rose gradually, from roughly 0% to relatively 15%.

The 1984-2000 period witnessed a slight fluctuation in the data of adults aging 25-35, starting at about 5% then soared up by approximately 20% 10 years later, followed by a mild oscillation but rose to more than 30% in the last year. In contrast, the youngest age group experienced a record of 10% in the beginning, after which it climbed to its peak of around 38% yet fell to reach the same figure as the second-oldest one.

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