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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000


thutyedaniel 32 / 38 17  
May 25, 2015   #1
The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.

The line graph reveals information concerning the population of India and China since 2000 and the population growth up is predicted to increase significantly until 2050. At first glance, it is evident that the population in India saw a steady rise over fifty-year period and it will overtake China at the first thirty-year period. Noted, Chinese is estimated to get a massive change in 2030, while it will fall significantly over the next twenty-year.

To begin with, in 2000, the total population of people living in China is bigger than India. Lots of Chinese societies saw around 1.25 billion, while Indian saw 1 billion. Between 2000 and the present, the number of Indian population had increased at 0.2 billion. Following this period, Chinese population had risen to 0.1 billion and had reached a massive at 1.35 billion.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the line graph reveals that Indian citizens are more likely to incline more quickly than Chinese, and both countries will have the same population at 1.45 billion in 2030. Chinese citizens will fall slightly to 1.4 billion, even though Indian citizens will rise until 1.6 billion in 2050.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
May 26, 2015   #2
A few points;
Para 1:
- Sentence 1: information concerning (DELETE) change into "...a breakdown of..."
Write the population growth without up.
Write your overview with a periodic sentence which is of the main clause at the end, so as to create interest of readers. Here is the formula: while sv, sv.

Para 2:
- Sentence 2; lots of Chinese societies... Indian saw 1 billion (DELETE) change into the dramatic growth has been driven largely by Chinese population with 1.25 billion. This stands in contrast to the estimated total population in India amounted to precisely 1 billion people.

- Sentence 3; the highest growth rate, Indian population increases roughly 0.2 billion, has occurred briefly between 2012 and the present. In the same time, China's population growth has risen from 0.1 to 1.35 billion.

Hope this helps. Thanks, eddy suaib


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