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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population


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Jul 28, 2020   #1

Population growth in two countries



topic:The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The above line chart displays and predicts the changes of the population figures for India and China from 2000 to 2050. Units are measured in billions. Overall, the two countries will have an increase in population sizes, where India's growth is more rapidly than of China.

Looking at the graph, in 2000, the populace of India started from 1000 billions and China from nearly 1300 billions people. Until now, 2020, the number of citizens of both countries have increased more than 100 billions, especially India with the growth of more than 300 billions in only 20 years.

By 2030, the number of Indians will be equal to the Chinese. The number of Chinese will peak at 1450 billions in 2030, and start falling in the next decades. As China's statistic start to downturn, India's quick growth will help the country to surge ahead. It is estimated that India will have 1,600 billion people as compared to China with 1,400 billion in 2050.




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Jul 28, 2020   #2
The summary overview is incomplete. You need to include the source of the information as indicated in the image. The source of the information was the UN Population Division and the reference for the chart is the medium variant. Both needed to be included in the summary overview.

The idea behind the task 1 essay is to see how well you can create a descriptive picture of the measurements, assuming the reader does not have a copy of the image. Therefore, you should not say "The image above". For all intents and purposes, the reader does not have a copy of the image. So you should assume that you need to give a perfectly imaginative description of the information for the reader to be able to create a mental picture of.

The second paragraph is short by 1 sentence to meet the minimum 3 sentences per paragraph. You can avoid running short on the sentence presentation by avoiding using long or run-on sentences. Your second sentence in that presentation should have been better cut up into individual sentences.

Your presentation is limited in terms of vocabulary use and punctuation marks. You need to vary your presentation to highlight your English language knowledge and also, your sentence presentation skills. Use a variety of punctuation marks. Don't just stick to using periods and commas.


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