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IELTS: Graph of the winter heating costs from 2003 to 2011


BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 23, 2014   #1
The graph shows the winter heating costs because of heating fuel type from 2003 to 2011.

In general, fuel oil has highest costs for consumers than electricity and natural gas. Although, electricity has lowest costs than others.

Electricity has small costs in winter seasons that started from $343 to $460 in the final. The costs increase step by step in every year. For natural gas, the costs increase slightly from April 2003 to June 2005 then decline twice until November 2010, from $627 to $547. However, fuel oil has biggest costs for consumers then increased sharply every year, started from $928 in April 2003 to $2425 in November 2010.

Interestingly, in October 2009 until November 2010, costs of electricity and natural gas have almost same value. It is very different than other years.

To summary, there are many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons, specially about fuel oil then followed by natural gas and electricity.




Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Apr 23, 2014   #2
To summary, there are many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons,

- it is not given! You just have to report what you see.

Plus, you don't have to have conclusion in the first task of IELTS.
Have these three parts:
1.Introduction
2.Overall view
3.Detailed information
Apsari 7 / 20 1  
Apr 23, 2014   #3
Electricity has smalllow costs in winter seasons that started from $343 to $460 in the final.

The costs increase step by step in every year. For natural gas, the costs increased slightly from April 2003 to June 2005 then decline twice until November 2010, from $627 to $547. However, fuel oil has was biggestthe highest costs for consumers then increased sharply every year, started from $928 in April 2003 to $2425 in November 2010.

You have to used simple present tense because the information shows in the past.

To summary, there are many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons, specially about fuel oil then followed by natural gas and electricity.

And you have to give your opinion in conclusion. it will good if you put 3 sentence in there.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 24, 2014   #4
The graph shows the winter heating costs because ofas per heating fuel type for the period offrom 2003 to 2011.

In general, consumers have incurred highest cost on fuel oil costsfor consumers thanand electricity and natural gas had been cheaper options for heating.Although, electricity has lowest costs than others.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 25, 2014   #5
I am also studying, let me share some alteration about your introduction

The graph shows the winter heating costs because of heating fuel type from 2003 to 2011.

Here my try
The line graph shows the winter heating cost in the field of natural gas, fuel oil and electricity consuming by elderly during a-particular period from 2003 to 2011.

or
The line graph illustrates the number of winter heating expenditure which is consumed by elderly during a-particular period from 2003 to 2011
hopefully it helps you :D
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 28, 2014   #6
Listing paragraph. I suggest you to make this paragraph with comparation and contrast. The second suggestion is that you should divide the detail information into two body paragraphs with the same proportion of sentence.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 28, 2014   #7
To summary, there are many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons, specially about fuel oil then followed by natural gas and electricity.

Hi sister Ira...
that is double verb


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