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IELTS Task 1: The graphs above give information about computer ownership


BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 30, 2014   #1
The graphs show the information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population compare with level of education in 2002 and 2010.

Generally, percentage of people who have computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same as computer ownership by education.
In the graph 1, we can see that the percentage of computer ownership increased every year, started just under 60% in 2002 until nearly 80% in 2010.

In the other side, graph 2 has explained about several computer ownerships by education level. High school graduate has value about 35% (2002) and 65% (2010). For college (incomplete) has percentage of 55% (2002) and 85% (2010). While for bachelor's degree has percentage of 70% (2002) and 90% (2010)

To summary, the highest percentage has number about 80% (2002) and 90% (2010) for postgraduate qualification. Although the lowest percentage, of number about 15% (2002) and 40% (2010) for no high school diploma.






Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 30, 2014   #2
The graphs showpresent the information about computer ownership on yearly basis from 2002 to 2010 and as a percentage of the population compare withas per the level of education in 2002 and 2010.

You need to describe both graphs equally and if there is any time periods presented in the graphs, you need to mention them too.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 30, 2014   #3
This is the same note I always share with you :D
Although many sample writings for the five ones coming from some corners of the world are confidently shown, this seems more likely to make beginner students hard to polish their sentence structure . you'd better Focus on the time given, not the lengthy report.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 30, 2014   #4
Although the lowest percentage, of number about 15% (2002) and 40% (2010) for no high school diploma.

in this sentence, you should put verb, I think you forgot to put it.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 30, 2014   #5
The key points of detail information in the writing task 1 tend to show the differences and similarities. So, you should make it impressive with comparison and contrast which is collaborated with.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 30, 2014   #6
when you go with writing task 1 which has two pictures, it will be better if you find the connection between these graphs, also you can put them as a conclusion or an overview
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 30, 2014   #7
is same as computer ownership by education
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 30, 2014   #8
Generally, percentage of people who haveowned a computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same astrend with computer ownership by the level of education such that higher the level more the ownership of computers..

To summary, the highest percentage has number about 80% (2002) and 90% (2010) for postgraduate qualification. Although the lowest percentage, of number about 15% (2002) and 40% (2010) for no high school diploma

I think you really do not need a summary for this task, It is good to have two substantial sized body paras.


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