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Group traveling is the best way to travel


Krystal318 8 / 18 2  
Nov 14, 2019   #1

group tour trip pros and cons



The best way to travel is to travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Group traveling with a tour guide is usually chosen by those who prioritize security. While this is a good option in terms of safety, I think it also limits much of your experience and could not become the best way.

There are many downsides when choosing a group tour trip. Firstly, your destinations are picked up by a tour guide, so there is a high probability that the places don't meet your preferences. Also, these destinations are mostly the popular tourist attractions which means the number of travelers from everywhere is in a great deal. This results in the unavoided overwhelming and affects negatively to your trip's quality. Moreover, this kind of travel only allows you a limited time for each spot; a tourist could get frustrated when their enjoyment for a certain place is quickly interrupted.

On the contrary, traveling in a group with a tour guide gives you a secure feeling especially when your destination is in dangerous places, such as countries on wars, jungles, deserts, etc. Traveling to these places requires an experienced tour guide who has broad knowledge about the places. More than that, group traveling can bring you more new friends who will make your trip more memorable and interesting.

To conclude, group traveling is one of many options for a traveler to pick up which has both benefits and drawbacks. Therefore, it can not be the best way for everyone's tastes.

Maria - / 1,102 389  
Nov 16, 2019   #2
@Krystal318
Hi. Thanks for being a consistent part of the forum! I hope that my feedback gives you insight on how to improve your writing.

Firstly, that first paragraph still lacks proper substantiation. After the first introductory sentence, you should have briefly expounded on the reason why safety is imperative. Give a briefing on what is happening in status quo with regards to the securing of safety for long-term purposes.

When we tackle the latter parts of the writing, the second paragraph lacks substantiation in the same regard. Taking a look at your writing closely, the second sentence up to the fourth appears to flow with the same core thoughts. In the long-run, this means that you aren't dealing with a lot of depth in writing because you were merely rephrasing without adding context and concrete real-life examples on the overall writing. Try to be more distinctive in your writing.

The conclusion draws in the same concerns. If we take a glance here, it is observable how your writing still needs to be substantiated more. Try to stray away from vague statements and stick with something more substantive.


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