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Growing numbers of people tend to buy things in supermarkets rather than at small, local stores.


Mike Wong 4 / 3 1  
May 7, 2016   #1
Nowadays, more people prefer to shop in supermarkets rather than in small shops and local markets. Why do you think this is? Is it a positive or negative development?

It is true that people in growing numbers tend to buy things in supermarkets rather than small stores and local markets. There are a variety of reasons for this trend, and I believe it has both benefits and drawbacks.

Supermarkets are gaining increasing popularity for various reasons. Perhaps the most important one is that they provide customers with a wider variety of products at lower prices. This is because supermarkets normally purchase items in bulk from suppliers, which means they are likely to enjoy discounts to a large extent. In other words, supermarkets can afford to lower the prices of their products to attract consumers. Besides, with strict regulations and effective management, supermarkets are able to keep their products fresher than those sold in small stores and local markets, which sometimes sell products that exceed shelf life. Also, supermarkets usually have large parking lots available to attract car owners, who normally have more buying power. Without these facilities, small stores and local markets pale in comparison with supermarkets.

Apart from facilitating citizens by providing them with better products and services, supermarkets also bring some drawbacks with citizens' preference for supermarket shopping. First of all, with more people going to supermarkets, small stores and local markets would be driven out of businesses, which would lead to unemployment. Besides, small stores and markets are usually located near residential areas. If they disappeared, residents would have to drive long distances to find a supermarket, rather than going to a local convenience store within walking distance. This can significantly bring people inconvenience, which is particularly true for elderly people or those who cannot drive or ride.

To sum up, there are a host of reasons for people's preference for shopping in supermarkets, and I firmly believe this trend has both positive and negative effects.

JuanSebastianR 23 / 63 37  
May 7, 2016   #2
Dear Mike,

I hope this finds you well.

Here are my comments for your essay:

The essay is very well written. You have great writing skills. I applaud you!

You answered the first portion of the question asking you why people are shopping in supermarkets instead of small, local stores. However, I don't think you emphasized the second part of the question enough: Is it a positive or negative development?

At the end of your essay, you wrote the same thing you wrote in the introduction. This makes your essay end with a weak tone. Instead, why don't you finish up by answering the second part of the question. You could end with your own opinion, saying it's either a positive or negative, and why you think that way.

Re-read your essay and ask yourself if you answered the question fully. It will help in the editing phase.

My best regards,

Juan Sebastian Rubio Lopez
Victoria1015 4 / 5  
May 7, 2016   #3
Hi Mike,

I think your essay is very organized!!

But, you lose the important thing that you should put your opinion which is very relevant to the prompt on your essay. (Why do you think this is? )

my stand: positive
main idea: lower price
e.g.: ...our family usually go to the supermarket for spectacular discounts event...


Hope you have a nice day:)
tria25 12 / 19 4  
May 10, 2016   #4
hello writer, you have done well in this writing.
please allow me to give my insights here.

it is better for you to paraphrase the statement for your introduction paragraph.
It is true that people in growing numbers tend to buy things in supermarkets rather than small stores and local markets.
it is the alternative
The enermous market attracts many people to buy their needs rather than traditional one and small shops.

you should mention where you stand whether positive or negative since you have to answer the question. after deciding it, you have to mention it in the overview.

actually, introduction and conclusion is almost the same,yet you should try to present them in different sentence.

warm regard


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