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happiness definition and factors influence in achieving happiness - consensus of opinions


thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 30, 2009   #1
please check for my grammar, structures and logic. thank so much

Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?


There is no double that every one, all over the world, always pursues happiness, which is considered that it is very important for our lives. Thus, What happiness is, how to achieve it are the controversial questions. In this essay, I will analyze happiness definition and factors which influence on acquiring happiness.

Obviously, it is really very difficult to achieve a perfect concept about happiness; because, it depends on several different factors such as which places people live, their cultures, their own views. There are several international research implemented during the last few decades; however, researchers have not acquired a perfect definition, and had the consensus of opinions. Some people link happiness to money, material demands; while, others link to emotions, personal relationships, personal achievement. For other one, the word "happiness" has no precise equivalent in some languages, and other complication is satisfaction.

In the real life, there are some factors which influence on the way people can achieve happiness such as personal achievement, personal relationships, their cultures, families and work. For example, in western countries, happiness often seems as a reflection of personal achievement, and they seem unhappy when they cannot achieve the most in their own lives. However, in Asia, people acquire happiness when they do not feel inferior or guilty. Nevertheless, if someone cannot have those conditions, it does not mean that they are unhappy, unsatisfied.

In conclusion, the answers for crucial questions about happiness: what happiness is how to achieve it, depend on many different factors.

tuanlnc 10 / 36  
Sep 30, 2009   #2
Hi,

The followings are some flaw which I can find out:

1. There is no double, There is no doubt.

2. which is considered that it is very important for our lives, is this clause too long & not efficient? How about "... considered to be very important for our lives."?

3. Use plural form after several several international researches.

Regarding the logic aspect of this essay, I think your conclusion doesn't state your opions about happiness and the way to achieve.

In my opinion, we can't define exactly what happiness is. Happiness is when you achieve your aims or when you can do what you want. Sometimes, it's just a small thing that makes you smile.

To make ourself feel happy, we should define our aims or objectives, then we plan to implement them. If we achieve them, we will feel happy. For instance, I plan to take the Toefl iBT exam and earn good marks. After achieving, I will smile & feel very happy.

Also, sharing your life with your family and your friends is a good way to enjoy our beautiful life.

Hope these make sense,

Tuan.
OP thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Nov 4, 2009   #3
I will analyze happiness definition and as well as factors which influence on acquiring happiness.

hi west, this is my essay, i wrote it about 2 months ago. pl check for me, thanks so muhc
Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?
west 4 / 5  
Nov 4, 2009   #4
As much as possible ensure your first sentence is devoid of spelling or grammatic errors. Thinhtvdhtm, iT IS THERE IS NO DOUBT....and not...There is no double

In line 2 what is happiness should follow with a question mark.

still in Line 2... i WILL analyze the definition of happiness and not....I will analyze happiness definition

Research as not had a consensus of opinion...and not have not had the consensus of opinions

The third paragraph, In real life, there are some factors which influence the way people ...and not...In real life, there are some factors which influence on the way people.

It is a good attempt but there are a lot of grammatic errors which could have been corrected by simpling reading through again and again.

cheers


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