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IELTS: Happiness - factors and importance; "small gap between birth and death"


Abdurasul 32 / 87 4  
May 3, 2014   #1
Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Answer:

My grandmother used to say: the life is a small gap between birth and death, so be happy in it. Admittedly, happiness has always been very pivotal in our lives but there is no strict definition of it. As a result, everyone can tell various factors of achieving felicity. In my perspective, there is a vast number of factors of achieving happiness and I will enlist vital ones.

To begin with, happy environment can be considered as a key factor in achieving happy state. In other words, living among happy family, friends and relatives can help you forget your woes and see to life with a optimistic view again. For example, when I have some misery, my friends always make some jokes and they make me smile. In this way, they are always very helpful in making me happier.

Further and even more vitally, not caring about what other people think of you is sometimes very important for being happy. As Winston Churchill said: we shall never reach our destination if we stop and throw a stone at every dog that barks. For example, when person cares about what other people say and think of him, that person can never feel real happiness. I think, we can feel happier when we become and do what we want to be, not what others want to see.

Having considered all the arguments above, we can finally draw a conclusion that happy environment and being ourselves without being ashamed of it are very important factors and essential parts of achieving happiness.

upinipin 32 / 49 1  
May 3, 2014   #2
Having considered all the arguments above, we can finally draw a conclusion that happy environment and being ourselves without being ashamed of it are very important factors and essential parts of achieving happiness.
OP Abdurasul 32 / 87 4  
May 5, 2014   #4
Waiting for ammendments! :D
Apsari 7 / 20 1  
May 5, 2014   #5
In other words, living among happy family, friends and relatives can help you to forget your woes and see tointo your life with a optimistic view again.

I think, we can feel happier than before when we become and do what we want to be, not what others want to see.
OP Abdurasul 32 / 87 4  
May 5, 2014   #6
What about coherence??
fikri 5 / 317 71  
May 5, 2014   #7
as a suggestion, you may put a suggestion to the readers in the conclusion paragraph, it will give more advantages to the readers
Pahan 1 / 1,909 553  
May 5, 2014   #8
My grandmother used to say: the life is a small gap between birth and death, so be happy in it.

A very wise saying - Nice :)

there isare a vast number of factors ofthat contribute to achieving happiness and I will enlist vital ones.

My grandmother used to say: the life is a small gap between birth and death, so be happy in it. Admittedly, happiness has always been very pivotal in our lives but there is no strict definition of it. As a result, everyone can tell various factors of achieving felicity. In my perspective, there is a vast number of factors of achieving happiness and I will enlist vital ones.

This is a quite good intro :)
To begin with, happy environment can be considered as a key factor in achieving happy stateto live happily.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,196 459  
May 6, 2014   #9
the life is a small gap between birth and death, so be happy in it

You'd better rewrite this expression. What I see is that many students think the memorization of the perfect phrases, let's say maxim, proverb, etc., is much more acceptable. As a result, they use it every time when they write. And to tell you the truth it doesn't impress the assessor at all. You may get penalized.
OP Abdurasul 32 / 87 4  
May 6, 2014   #10
Do you think it is better not to use proverbs, quotes, sayings at all??
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
May 7, 2014   #11
Further and even more vitally, not caring about what other people think of you is sometimes very important for being happy.

.... You need to elaborate a little more on this point before giving the example as it does not look like a more direct and obvious factor.

Further, and more importantly, being thick skinned too is an important factor that keeps us happy. If a person is over sensitive to other's reactions, then it is difficult to pursue his or her goals.
OP Abdurasul 32 / 87 4  
May 9, 2014   #12
What do you think is it Ok if I use sayings, proverbs and quotes?? Or shall I get penalized because they can consider it as memorization??


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