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Happiness ratings for people who have partner and do not have partner in the US


Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Oct 28, 2016   #1
The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness rating for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts give information about the percentage of a research on enjoyable ratings for people who have partner and do not have partner in the US and a happiness from married people when they have children or not. Overall, it can be seen that spouse have higher number of happiness at twice than single person. But, for all people, level of happiness is under 50 percent. Besides that, husbands and wives who have teenagers are happier than spouse have young adults.

The happiest people who have partner is 18-29 years old at 45 percent. But for the single person that has age group 65 and more is 34 percent. Furthermore, spouse in 50-64 age group have the lowest percentage of happiness at 40 percent, and unmarried people in the same group-ages and in 18-29 age group at 21 percent.

Husbands and wives who have teenagers have higher ratings at 44 percent for happiness than who have young adults at 41 percent. The second happiest is spouse who have not children at 43 percent. For happiness level in married people who have and do not have children is not much different.


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akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 28, 2016   #2
Hi Wily..
I hope these can finalize your writing.
GOOD LUCK


who have partner and do not have partner

Be careful of paraphrasing. Actually, in the technic of paraphrasing, you must not paraphrase one by one word. When you change structure of the sentence, it is also paraphrasing. be careful of ordering the word. Partner has different meaning with married couple.

spouse have higher number of happiness at twice than single person

Happiness is the uncountable noun. Don't use the higher number for the uncountable noun. This is an alternative sentence for your overview.
Overall, it can be obviously seen that the married couple in the USA feels happier than the unmarried person.

But for the single person

HOWEVER,........
You have to remember distinguishing between the conjunction and transitive word. There needs the transitive word after a period.

at 44 percent for happiness than who have

at 44 percent for happiness, WHILE THE MARRIED COUPLES have
faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Oct 28, 2016   #3
Hello wil iwiwill wkwkwkwk...

... research on enjoyable ratings for people who have partner and do not have partner

1. Please be careful with the meaning of this. Partner has a wider meaning, not same as the spouse or wife or husband.

For happiness level in married people who have and ...
2. It is better you add some connector that make it looks more connect with previous sentence because IELTS writing will be better if your idea linked each other. For instance you can add this :

Based on the data happiness level...... // So.... happiness level //// etc

Overall is good, less grammatical error Wil. Keep fighting !!!
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Oct 28, 2016   #4
Hello willy!
Allow me to give you some suggestion.

...people who have partner and do not have partner in the US and a happiness...
It is so risk when you use these words to paraphrase, since "partner" have so large mean.

Besides that, husbands and wives who have teenagers are happier than spouse have young adults.
It is not clear conclusion, you have to mention married people who do not have children for full comparison

Keep practice for make it perfect :)
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Oct 28, 2016   #5
Hi Wily, below are my thoughts on your analysis essay;

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There you have it Wily, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and should you need further assistance do let us know, we will be here for you.


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